cheesy cheesy cheese....thats yellow sits upon a handsome fellow and as he swallows then he bellows, THATS SOME CHEESY CHEESY STUFF!! where did u get it?? is this a bluff??
THANK yu................i no........ its a beaut.. took me three hours to think of something that RADICAL!
2007-08-26 16:12:26 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
i was just kidding people but if i seriously wrote a poem youd be amazed
2007-08-27 03:28:59 · update #1
It has its own appeal, that's for sure! When I read it to myself, it doesn't seem to stand out ... but when I read it aloud, it's really interesting. Yeah, I like it. It's different ... RADICAL!
2007-08-26 17:04:32 · answer #1 · answered by Jewels 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good start - but too wordy - and it doesn't flow very well.
poetry is several things
1 - it's like taking a snapshot - not an outpouring of feelings
2- it's writing and then editing - so there's the creative part where you brainstorm and write - and then you put your editor hat on and then edit and clean it up. it looks like you just did the creative part where you did the brainstorming and creating, but you didn't edit it, you didn't clean it up. poems aren't supposed to be wordy like this - they are supposed to be short, catchy - too the point, like taking a snapshot.
promise - next time -brainstorm like you did here, and then put your editor hat on and then clean it up and make it work. sometimes you have to go back and forth.
if you just create and never edit, you'll never be a really good poet, but you are on your way - keep trying.
2007-08-26 23:28:51 · answer #2 · answered by art_flood 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
say cheese please ,
DIANA TO DI
D ‘‘Diana the queen of people’s hearts,
I In the wilderness she lies, all alone,
A At Althorp, her island of calm and peace,
N Never to be disturbed from solace at last,
A A ROYAL HIGHNESS, deserved in the past.’’
T To her a tribute this is,
O On her 10th death anniversary.
D DIANA is the soul of loneliness,
I In human memory, for ever cast.”
2007-08-28 10:25:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its fantastic...truly.
Reminds me of how much I love waffies.
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2007-08-27 00:15:22 · answer #4 · answered by Interlude Jones 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
WHAT......THE HELL.....WAS THAT?????
It SUCKED!!!
Why cheese?
2007-08-26 23:21:41 · answer #5 · answered by AE 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
can anyone say.....
cheesy?
2007-08-26 23:21:25 · answer #6 · answered by leiar 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
say cheese..........
2007-08-27 12:03:30 · answer #7 · answered by NATALIE 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋