I called,
I waited for a response
It rained
It snowed
No response
Expected to welcome you with open arms?
Open heart
Open mind
I know what is wanted
Do I give in?
Do I give up?
How do I go about it?
Oh my god
My mind is racing
Speeding around
I didn’t get what I needed.
I didn’t get what was expected
Love
Respect
Trust
I never thought about it like that
Cheating
Lying
didn’t love me
Never did
Why did I get played?
I didn’t expect it
Loved him
Loved dreams
Maybe that’s all it was
A Dream
Gone wrong
Gone horribly Wrong
Abusive
Deceitful
Deceived
I thought I was in love
I thought I was loved
I thought we were more then one night
I thought we meant more to each other
I thought wrong
But how?….
Blinded
2007-08-26 10:25:18 · 17 answers · asked by ? 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
wow...
This is great. How beautiful. I like the flow.
Just Brilliant. ♥
2007-08-26 10:38:25 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is one GREAT poem. You should really continue writing. I hope that is what you are planning to do. I was just drawn into the emotions of this with the first few lines. This is what all writers dream of. How old are you? If you are some place you can, get this to a professional (English or writer) and see what they think of it. WONDERFUL!!!
~fishineasy~
2007-08-26 10:35:26 · answer #2 · answered by fishineasy™ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Oh wow...I really liked it. It was just like so many people I know crying out to the world. I believe you have a gift for writing. You really know how to capture the true feelings of a person. Hurting, Deceived, blinded. (great words deceived, blinded)
2007-08-26 10:31:52 · answer #3 · answered by Ashla 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I certainly have been by this time and time lower back with coach after coach. the only element you're able to do is instruct which you're extra helpful. human beings communicate each and all the time and a marvelous style of of the time that is purely issues which will psych the different guy or woman out. do not refer to the instructor yet, the season has not even began, so which you fairly don't be responsive to what is going to ensue at inquisitive with regards to the gang. The coach I had this season grew to become into insane, he could yell at absolutely everyone and each physique. I felt like i grew to become into the underdog on a team of surprising skills. i assumed that i grew to become into being ignored and grew to become into not getting the enjoying time I deserved. in the commencing up of the season I made it my objective to get the instructor to observe me and for him to on no account want to take me off the court docket. I worked so perplexing, 5x extra solid than extremely everyone else. i grew to become into the 1st at prepare and the final to bypass away, I ran the toughest, sweat the main and grew to become into the main vocal on the court docket. there are a number of of issues you're able to do to instruct which you're extra helpful than her and which you should play over her. in case you act like the perfect participant than you always would be. bypass in there useful and make useful that the instructor knows which you're prepared to artwork extremely perplexing merely to earn your place as libero on your team.
2016-10-03 06:49:14 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Lovely!
2007-08-26 10:30:37 · answer #5 · answered by Elizabeth L 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds good, but i think that you should relocate the word blinded, because i think it would sound better elsewhere, that plus the "But how?..." would give the poem a more mysterious deep meaning.
2007-08-26 10:31:36 · answer #6 · answered by smtgrt1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. I think this expresses emotions a lot of human beings have experienced at one time or another.
2007-08-26 10:28:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A lot of hurt ,it seems but a great poem.
2007-08-26 13:48:36 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, sound like the stuff I used to write when I was 14...didnt everyone?
2007-08-26 10:31:14 · answer #9 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Why can't people write about happy things like puppies and rainbows?
2007-08-26 10:33:07 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋