Do I write well?

Question

Tell me what you think. Do i write well? Feel free to give suggestions.


It was a quarter to midnight. Three dark figures crowded around a small marble table in the center of a spherical room with a high domed ceiling. The orange glare of the crackling fire shadowed their features, leisurely clouding the room with dense, gray smoke.
Desarray Decklen studied her reflection in a mirror hanging above the fire place. Despite the semi- darkness, her radiance remained abundant… at least to Theodore Dexan who was admiring her from the opposite side of the table.
Dexan, as he preferred to be called, was dressed the same as Desarray – in a long black cloak— except for Desarray’s green broche which became a common accessory to those who knew her well.
Desarray caught his stare and smiled curiously, her teeth as white as snow. Dexan turned away, pretending to stare at the roaring fire.

Answer 1

You seem pretty good with description, though there are a few phrases that are a little awkward. But this segment doesn't say anything about whether you can do character development, plot, and that kind of thing. Those are more important than description, anyway.

Answer 2

Yes, I like your style. I'm a writer too. If you get a chance, please visit my website at http://www.rubysbooks.i8.com. I'm a person that believes in doing my own thing, so my writing style is not the norm but it's me. When I wrote my book, I had to set my computer to check my grammar as well as spelling because I wanted my writing formal and I wanted to make sure that I wrote in the active voice. I didn't want any passive sentences. The computer will let you know when you type a sentence using the passive voice. What I mean by passive voice is "The ball was thrown by John." The active voice is "John threw the ball." I have a habit of writing passive sentences. Smile...

Answer 3

I know that this sounds counter-intuitive, but you are being a little bit too descriptive. you could probably paint the same picture with a few less adjectives. other than that i would absolutely LOVE to see what happened next. sounds like a good start to an excellent story

Answer 4

I love it! I like how you used the words about the room to almost describe the tension. I can picture it the girl and the boy staring at her from afar. Is it a romance-drama or what? I would love to read more!

Answer 5

ya u write great fake stories about urself. In the pregnancy forum, u are a 12 yr old who got raped and is pregnant. In the drama sextion u are a blind actrress who starred in 3 playz. Here u are somebody who sold ur book only u didnt. U deleted a post by someone who told the truth but a lot of us know her and she dont lie so we cached it. And she is right. U r a fake. u come here and make stuff up. nobody shuld listen to u. @@

Answer 6

You write good. :-) Get it...

But seriously - I like the story but you use a few to many adjectives! Focus more on plot and theme - you already have the descriptions down!

Answer 7

Tighten it up a bit, but yeah, you write pretty well. Adjectives are OK as long as the language as tight. Use as few words as possible.

Answer 8

First of all when you ask someone if you write well you are only just fishing for compliments

And second of all, you did write this very well.

Answer 9

"Advice is what we ask for when we already know the ansewer to the question"I don't know who said that first(I wish it were me!)but,it's true.You know you're a writer,i know you're a writer,now,finish this story(I already want to know more!)& stop wondering!Get w/it girl!

Answer 10

It is written very well.
I wish I could read more.