The Crack In The Door
That crack in the door
I’ve seen it before
In fact
Its there everyday
So dark and deep
I should know it
completely
I just want it to go away
I sleep now at night
With one eye open
Pondering
what’s beyond in the door
I hear all the thumping
The grumbling
The bumping
The whispers
The tapping
The constant rap rapping
I just wonder who
Who is behind this
What do they see
When they’re looking at me?
I wake in the morning
No shower for days
Not even a shave I can do
I sit in my chair
Always aware
that the crack in the door
Is still there
I lost my job
My wife has left
It has something to do
With the crack I bet
I need the courage
The courage to merge
Up next to the crack in the door
I slowly start walking
The voices are mocking
“You’ll never know what we’re here for!”
I pick up the poker
And get even closer
To the door with a G*d awful crack
2007-08-25 14:25:09 · 8 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I raise up the tool
To plunge it straight through
With one horrendous whack
Though something to ponder
As I step back and wonder
Why it seems so familiar to me
Removing the poker
While feeling “The Joker”
Were now two cracks to be seen?
2007-08-25 14:25:41 · update #1
Shades of Edgar Allen Poe.....
That reminded me of his work, but the comical ending gave me quite a chuckle.
Thanx
2007-08-25 14:36:51 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice one here....just like a story as i was reading it and got more curious as to what is to be unfold next and you have really captured the meaning of the word paranoia with the readers feeling....unlike the dictionary this one really 'show' the reader paranoia even right to the comical edge....because to some extent some paranoia is silly yet haunting the person having it
2007-08-26 12:25:17 · answer #2 · answered by soundfamiliar 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The crack is the personification of my fears, but i find that it is not the door that is cracked, but rather my own mind.
2007-08-26 04:40:23 · answer #3 · answered by plasmajosh 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Seems like some noodeling is going on, that's not a green door is it? Remember that song?
2007-08-25 21:53:52 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love your style!!!
It is so refreshing to see someone else share such a blast of feelings , and emotion.
2007-08-27 13:42:10 · answer #5 · answered by Captain Mozar 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was comical good one I usually dont write humor poems so its refreshing. Keep Writing!!!
2007-08-26 01:45:21 · answer #6 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very good..kept me on the edge of my seat till the...this could be a movie...or mini series...have a star..beam me up bronte
2007-08-25 22:51:50 · answer #7 · answered by eb_guy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
nahhhh,,,,u can do better...simplify,,,,,,
d.
2007-08-27 20:14:41 · answer #8 · answered by dorian 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋