What do you think of my poem?

Question

It might sound a bit cheesy, all criticism welcomed.

Good Morning,
Birds are singing, trees are swinging,
The sun rises with all its force. It's rays touch the waters making them glow, but failed to touch the heart that is in mourn.

Good Afternoon,
The crowds gather in the streets for their daily bread,
Talking away the ideas in their heads. While others mourn their soulful pain, praying away for resignation to gain.

Good Evening,
The shadows begin to fade, as the sun begins to set.
The mourners eyes dry out, but the pain is still there being expressed with a shout. It is the only relief for them.
That, plus words of faith that end with "Amen"

Goodnight,
The everyday life takes a brief pause but not an end.
The ones we love we think we lost, we will meet again.
Life goes on after a life ends.
Just like the moon rises and the sun sets.

Answer 1

,What's the matter with cheese, I like cheese.
I don't think I'm evolved enough to get poetry, I read it no less than 5 times and what I feel from it is peoples pain (maybe your own) grieve at the loss of a loved one,
but because of faith we, (you) will be with the loved ones again.
I think it was brilliant,
I was able to understand it.
-Martin Luther said,
If you want to change the world,
pick up your pen.
Your not only picking up the pen you are all so engaging your brain.

Answer 2

I love the concept of dividing life into parts of the day. You have a way to go with imagery and rhythm, but you have a feeling for poetry. Keep writing; some day I'm sure you'll write a real poem.

Answer 3

I love it. It has a nice moral and I love the sections.

Answer 4

that is REALLY good. I like it because it has a good meaning and not like some others i have read that are kinda sad. urs has a point. and i like that.

Answer 5

GOOD EFFORT, KEEP WORKING, POETRY IS DIFFICULT