thrteen years
Reflections always start to lie,
The mirror knows too much.
Yesterday has long since past,
And tomorrow may never come. .
Thirteen years, nothings changed,
Your promises have all died.
I never let you see my rage,
You could never see me cry.
All your gifts came straight from hell,
A strangers mournful scream.
The scripts already been written,
Someone has to take the fall.
There are no rainbows anywhere,
The words that I desire.
No choices for the chosen,
I could never figure why?
Now you know what I see,
The voice behind the veil.
Confessions decieve, never relieve,
Not with Satan at the helm.
Our souls together, now ripped apart,
My thoughts they transcend time.
Now you know just where I stand,
But I can never tell you why.
2007-08-25 07:13:36 · 5 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Typical for my age???? I am 48 LOL I am engaged to a 20 year old girl, but i don't think that has anything to do with this poem.
2007-08-25 08:59:13 · update #1
Sorry you don't like to read ugly thoughts, but the world is full of them. Everything is not rainbows, puppies and kitties. Evil and darkness far outnumber the good n this world. Take a trip to Darfur, or Somalia or Cuba or Russia or North Korea. We stand on the brink of nuclear war. Sorry if I'm pessimistic.
2007-08-25 09:03:36 · update #2
Excellent.
Why can't we voice our concerns
out loud to the ones who make our lives hell?
2007-08-25 07:58:27 · answer #1 · answered by Beach Saint 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like healing is going on. But you never seem to end it on a wiser note. Have you considered that all is not one way or the other? but perhaps somewhere in between. Perhaps no one meant to hurt you. Like some evil plot only for you. Perhaps it never had anything to do with you or perhaps you were so absorbed in other things you couldn't see the hurt you may have caused. Perhaps you don't want to see the beauty in life. But ya it's well written but I don't like to ready ugly thought. I need inspiration.
2007-08-25 14:42:28 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
what a beautiful poem. Something about dark and dreary and melancholy poems just attract me. I don't think I have ever written a happy poem in my life. I am only 14 though.
2007-08-25 16:36:58 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Dark and dreary . . . typical for your age. However, your message is lost in the garble of trying to turn a clever phrase.
Metaphor is good in poetry, but you do have to know what you're trying to say before you try to give it an artful twist.
With that in mind, I think you have talent and should keep on writing . . . we all must continually strive to perfect our craft! :D
2007-08-25 14:23:18 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I guess that's why they call you the dark prince !!!
See the Light and DO this:
Have UnConditional Love and Peace by accomplishing this:
Create Your Relationship with Our Creator.
UnConditional Love and Peace is the only answer.
2007-08-25 14:17:49 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋