Eden style
Vol tage, respond to the infinite in the finite
Repetition of meaning,
Velasquez and
Where is
Open, open the sky, why? Why not?
Even if
Suspended thought
See
See it
Even if
Ok
Its you who said
Say?
Nevertheless dreams,
Dreamin’ is
Open
Open the sky
Net
Net of
Escape
Continuous escape
Of the known
Respond to the feeling
intuition
Is it?
Is it there?
Or
OR………..Maldoror
Here
In the universal presence of the
I
Open:
Suspended thought
A theory or a practice
OR
Open the:
Silver spoon to eat, digest and ****
The good and the bad
Open/
The sky is
It is the rhythm of the heart which
Counter
Counter says
Says the mind
Beyond Within
Suspended thought
The memory
Of
OFF
Open:
The
Silver, silver, silver
Spoon
Now open:
Christ lying down
Sleeping Christ
In
Buddha
Christ off the Christians
Adamantine
Sperms
Of the universal
I
OR
Is it. ?
Even if, nevertheless
Similar to what?
The suspension of the here and now
NOW HERE…nowhere
its just part 1/ask for part 2/if u want
2007-08-24 05:30:36 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
I'll pass on part 2, this is poetry, in it's freest form. It kind of reminds me of a coffee bar where people recite their poems to the beat of bongo drums, with a cigarette dangling from their mouths. I'm sure it is a treasure to some, but to me it looks like there really is nothing to be said here, and it's taking up lines on a page to fulfill an assignment.
2007-08-24 05:36:05 · answer #1 · answered by Hot Coco Puff 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
The mind indeed is wandering, there may be poetry here but it needs extensive revision to bring it into clearer focus.
It is too long and rambling, without discipline or metre. There are some good images and constructions, but they are lost to the repetition and play on words.
2007-08-24 12:36:57 · answer #2 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ramblings are a start often times in development of serious work. Reminds me of slam poetry but I don't think it would work well recited without a lot of work.
2007-08-24 12:43:10 · answer #3 · answered by RT 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ive seen similar poetry and i will say that they are synonyms. yes its just nonsense from the brain, but poetry isnt as great as it used to be, the standards are extremely low nowadays
2007-08-24 12:40:52 · answer #4 · answered by ceesteris 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Mind ramblings!!!
Good luck and may God bless you.
2007-08-24 12:34:34 · answer #5 · answered by kathleen m 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋