Is this sentence forrect?

Question

Spencer rushes towards the fire, nudging past Dayton, and uses the vase water to kill the flames.

Answer 1

Sounds more correct than forrect.

I might say...Nudging past Daytona, Spencer rushed towards the fire and used the water in the vase to kill the flames.

Answer 2

Spencer shoved [or pushed] Dayton aside, rushed toward the fire, and killed the flames with the water in the vase.
Or:
Spencer pushed Dayton aside while rushing toward the fire, and killed the flames with the water in the vase.
Or, in the order you had it:
Spencer rushed toward the fire, pushing Dayton aside, and killed the flames with the water in the vase.
In the second example, the phrase "while rushing toward the fire" is still in the past tense. It's simply "while he was rushing toward the fire" in abbreviated form.
In the third, again, "pushing Dayton aside" is short for "pushing Dayton aside while he rushed."
"Uses" only adds an unnecessary word and makes the action less immediate and less forceful.
If this is a story, normally describe the action in the past tense, because it's presumably already happened. When the characters speak, they may speak in the present tense as appropriate in ordinary speech.
Spencer is in a hurry and "nudging" is something you do if you're standing there, not if you're rushing.
The second is probably best, because it conveys the exact meaning that you expressed in your first sentence, i.e., that Dayton was pushed aside while Spencer was running, not before he started running and not after he stopped running.

Answer 3

Spencer rushes towards the fire, nudging past Dayton, and uses the vase water to kill the flames.
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ok thats your sentence, i'm not sure if this is what you mean but....... nudging i'm pretty sure isn't the word you want.

Answer 4

It looks right...what sounds wrong about it? Maybe put "Nudging past Dayton, Spencer rushes ..." but it sounds fine your way.

To the person bellow me, you only use semicolons when you are separating two COMPLETE sentences that are closely related...not in that spot.

I also think you should keep "rushES" and "nudgING" b/c ing is present tense and es says what they are doing/does.
Hope that helps!!

Answer 5

...Spencer rushes towards the fire; nudging past Dayton and uses the vase of water to extinguish the flames.

Look closely at my "punctuation" and the "word" change...

Answer 6

it sounds correct and is correct if you are using the present tense. but i don't think nudge would be the right term with past. try removing "past" or replace "nudging".

peace out!

Answer 7

It is perhaps not how Shakespeare might have constructed it, but it gramatically correct and the meaning is clear.

Answer 8

Might sound better if all the tenses are the same......rushES, nudgES, and usES.....not nudgING.


I agree with ghouly.

Answer 9

It is correct.