I was answering a question headed "Poem, not quite right" but my version would not respond to "Submit"

Question

My amended and somewhat "plagarised" version
(As requested by the original author) is below:

Let your eyes rest on me like soft, warm and gentle rain
so that they display your wonders rarely seen
I bask in your warmth as your sunbeams cover me with wondrous hope and expectation. Clean,
And raise me to an ideal life; I'll never be the same again!

I invite others to comment and/or improve it
A second verse perhaps?

Answer 1

Let your eyes rest on me like soft, warm rain
so the wonders emerge and are seen

I am covered in the waves of your emotions and surrounded by the clouds of your gaze keeping me wet and washing me Clean

You have shown me the way, Now its your turn to follow and feel,
its time for you to express and cover this with your seal.

Answer 2

Let your eyes rest on me, warm, gentle rain
Show me wonders I've so seldom seen
Your sun beams hope and thoughtful expectation
And I shall bask within your warmth, pristine
Raise me and I'll learn to live again

Touch me with your laughter, soft, honey sweet
Play that music only hearts can hear
And pluck each secret string's anticipation
The way you do whenever I am near
Then melt me in the fire of passion's heat

:)

Answer 3

My goodness me! Ummmm>>>faints