When there’s one straw left,
Between your heart
And death,
It’s so hard,
To leave it behind,
And walk the other way.
The final Straw,
Is the most beautiful of all,
Shining, Shimmering, Beckoning;
But like the others,
Its promise may be misunderstood,
So why should I bother?
That last tempting straw,
So fragile, so delicate,
But a barrier to all.
Give me the strength,
To lift that straw,
And the dreams to hold on.
2007-08-23 19:41:47 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
This was written in the past, I chose to hold on. 6 years later I regained her as a best friend and she has helped me gain a whole new world open to me because of it. But, it is hard at the time. Faith will carry you far.
2007-08-23 22:57:39 · update #1
its good but it feels like your lost in this one. Trying to decide between two things. Personally, as long as you can feel what you are writing about then you are on the right track. Keep going. I would expand this one a little further to see what you can come up with.
Keep writing.
2007-08-23 21:34:37 · answer #1 · answered by PRS TruckIN 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the poem, especially the ending because it gives hope.
''To lift that straw
And the dreams to hold on''. As well, it reminds me of our 20 year old son that died. I won't say how he committed suicide because there are some people on this site [especially in philosophy] that I don't want to reveal this too. However, our son used to always drink with a straw and whenever he ran out of them, he'd buy more. Quite some time after he passed away...I would use humor to heal my grief and we still had straws that he had bought, and we kept them as a keepsake and I would jokingly say: I guess those are the straws that broke the camel's back. My younger son used to think that was funny.
2007-08-25 03:44:10 · answer #2 · answered by birdtennis 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!
It describes exactly the cross road i am currently at.
When you hold the final straw in hands
Staring at its broken form
Why carry on? Do you carry on? Do you give up? Do u rather believe?
2007-08-24 05:20:19 · answer #3 · answered by *Lee*D* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG- what a beautiful poem- thank you for sharing that- love Jo xx
2007-08-24 14:39:59 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good but I rather have something edible than just to look at beautifully arrange words from nothing.(lol) I'm just teasing you.
2007-08-24 14:23:16 · answer #5 · answered by @NGEL B@BY 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Either you suffer stroke or fingers injured....otherwise you will never take notice of straw!!! (smile)
2007-08-24 05:03:56 · answer #6 · answered by harijanti 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No comments it is very personal.
2007-08-24 09:48:51 · answer #7 · answered by lbelfer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋