Well, hey, honey, don’t you cry,
It’s not your fault we’ve fallen apart.
It’s not the things we did, but the things we didn’t.
It’s not the things we said, but the things we didn’t.
It’s not the things we want, but the things we are,
That took us and stripped us and left us so far...
Sometimes, still, when the night is just right,
I can see you smiling in heaven’s light.
Haunting my memories with a tear-stained kiss,
Reminding me of the times we missed.
But I won’t cry, no I can’t cry.
There are no more tears for angels or fears.
There are no more tears for angels or fears,
No more tears for souls without years.
I’ve sold my soul for one more kiss.
And I’ve sold my heart for something I’ve missed.
Now it’s time to face tomorrow,
Graced by the touch of sorrow.
2007-08-23 17:17:00 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I think you tried to hard to rhyme instead of letting the poem flow, and I think you can take the idea and don't push it. Good luck!
2007-08-23 17:26:40 · answer #1 · answered by Erin 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
I was moved, so it is a successful poem.
I often write in a similar rhyme scheme. It's harder than it looks.
It is a pensive and melancholy poem.
2007-08-24 03:56:42 · answer #2 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really liked it. Keep up the good work. Thank you so much for sharing! A+++++
2007-08-24 00:55:02 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
To avoid tears, become rip-stop nylon.
2007-08-25 17:03:29 · answer #4 · answered by Bruce M 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is by far the best poem I've seen here.
My first reaction was oh whoa!
Thanks for sharing!
Hope you share more!
2007-08-24 00:49:00 · answer #5 · answered by Poetry 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋
i love the begining! sounds like song lyrics, very nice!
2007-08-24 01:14:45 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
nice I like it and I remember johnson and johnson baby shampoo (lol)
2007-08-24 14:30:26 · answer #7 · answered by @NGEL B@BY 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great dont lose yourself you have a strong mind to write this way
2007-08-24 09:36:38 · answer #8 · answered by ben s 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is beautiful and if you feel like rhyming, then that is what makes it yours.
Cheers!
2007-08-24 00:34:15 · answer #9 · answered by doggie love 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
you can add up a beat to it...it's more like of a song.
2007-08-24 02:19:54 · answer #10 · answered by leighn 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋