please read and give me suggestions if you can! what grade would you give me?

Question

this is a 7th grade paper (its only supposed to be 2 paragraphs not a full paper) :

The Huguenots
The Huguenots were French Protestants, who called themselves reformers because they thought the name Huguenot was offensive. They believed that the Catholic Church became to fancy and they wanted to make it more fancy. They didn’t make crosses or any fancy religious objects. Unlike the Catholic Church they believed that forgiveness from God was free and you didn’t have to pay the church money to have your sins forgiven. They believed in doing good works. Your life was decided before birth. They educated both boys and girls. You couldn’t dance or play cards, you were aloud to drink alcohol. They had a very simple life.
The St. Bartholomew Massacre was on the night of August 23rd through August 24th 1572. Catholic Priests and French soldiers murdered more than 8,000 Huguenots that night. The Huguenot Priests weren’t the only pe

Answer 1

here are some suggested corrections and some more information. Don't use the stuff out of Wikki without changeing it around. A lot!!!

The Huguenots were French Protestants. They called themselves reformers because they thought the name Huguenot was offensive. They believed that the Catholic Church had become too fancy and they wanted a Church that was more simple and conservative. They didn’t make spectacular crosses and religious objects. Unlike the Catholic Church they believed that forgiveness from God was free and you didn’t have to pay the church money to have your sins forgiven. They believed in doing good works. They believed that your life was decided before birth. They educated both boys and girls. Dancing, playing cards and drinking alcoholic beverages was forbidden. . They had a very simple life.
The St. Bartholomew Massacre was on the night of August 23rd through August 24th 1572.
Catholic Priests and French soldiers murdered more than 8,000 Huguenots that night….

and thats the end of whats available of your question!

Both of the following paragraphs are taken right out of Wikkipedia. If your teacher see’s them in this form she will bust you. But you can paraphrase and change things around a little. In your paragraph you say that they WERE allowed to drink alcohol is that correct or did you mean not allowed?

In what became known as the St. Bartholomew's Day Massacre of 24 August – 17 September 1572, Catholics killed thousands of Huguenots in Paris. Similar massacres took place in other towns in the weeks following, with death toll estimates again ranging wildly, from thousands to as high as 110,000. An amnesty granted in 1573 pardoned the perpetrators.

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Above all, Huguenots became known for their fiery criticisms of worship as performed in the Roman Catholic Church, in particular the focus on ritual and what seemed an obsession with death and the dead. They believed the ritual, images, saints, pilgrimages, prayers, and hierarchy of the Catholic Church did not help anyone toward redemption. They saw Christian faith as something to be expressed in a strict and godly life, in obedience to Biblical laws.

So the Huguenots were the beginnings of the Protestant movement and Protestand Church!

good luck

Answer 2

The sentance They thought the Catholic church was to fancy and they wanted to make it more fancy - dosent make since. Re read then re write that. I also thnk fancy is a weak word here. Replace it at least once in the sentance. Good luck!

Answer 3

I will record a couple of for every class for you which are well reads and feature massive literary benefit that you'll be able to examine. For fiction: the adventures of huckleberry Finn, slaughterhouse-5, king Lear, the center of darkness, the crucible, the scarlet letter, the stranger, the poisonwood bible. Some non-fiction books which are similarly fine are the diary of Anne Frank, the wrestle of the bulge, the geeks, boomerang, it will get higher, and the social animal. Look up a couple of of the ones, they're all valued at studying!

Answer 4

its too plain. Get a thesaurus....quick, and give it more pizzaz. find a better topic sentence that isn't a fact...thats too common.