Life is like water
You can fall in it
You can drown in it
And you can live without it
Yes, it's simple, but I love to write. Be totally honset.
2007-08-23 11:45:58 · 41 answers · asked by Katie M 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I like it. But did you mean can't instead of can?
2007-08-23 11:49:49 · answer #1 · answered by beckini 6 · 6⤊ 0⤋
Do you realize that over half the answers came from stupid people who also don't realize that if you don't have life, you are dead, and if you don't have water, your life will end shortly, and again, all you will have is death. I think you might have made an honest typo mistake, but too many just wanted to tell you how wonderful it is to try for 10 points. Oh well, I guess that's LIFE.
2007-08-23 15:19:17 · answer #2 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
So...you're saying that you can live without life? THe logic fails in the last line and though it might not have been the way that you wanted to go is that you "can't" live without it.
Or choose a different metaphor.
Sorry.
2007-08-23 12:44:55 · answer #3 · answered by ObscureB 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thought provoking which is good , here's one of my own .
Life is like water
It will defeat any object
Stay true to its path
It will part when it needs to
And return when its past
It can never be broken
Just turned from its path
While water runs freely
Our life will last .
Oh no I've finally cracked up !
2007-08-23 12:04:07 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
'Quote', is the word your looking for to describe that. But I don't like it... It makes no sense...!
You can't live without water and without life you'd be dead. I understand loving to write, being a published poet myself. But you need to put more thought 'n effort into your work if you really want to say your writing...
Like what your trying to get out of this; what your trying to say. But try harder...!
Luck.
2007-08-23 14:40:18 · answer #5 · answered by Twili 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it, it's short and to the point. maybe you can try writing diamante poems, they're really fun. and if you don't know what they are, they're a poem that is in the shape of a diamond. and it can be either 1 or 2 opposite topics. i.e. night and day.
they can be fun to write especially since you usually use a lot of adjectives. good luck writing, and continue to, it's a great way to express your feelings on life and share opinions.
2007-08-23 13:10:03 · answer #6 · answered by Olivia 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good, but how can u live without life or water? But otherwise i like it. You should write more and make it into a song. Email me and i can help you.
2007-08-23 11:53:29 · answer #7 · answered by Michelle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really like it- its really simple but i think thats what makes it even better, you can say something so powerful in just four lines! that shows how you are such a good writer you can be. i love the second and third line the best :)
2007-08-23 11:57:07 · answer #8 · answered by torie 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Can you live without water,,, and without life? I'm sure it's a little typing problem... still it's really nice! Keep it up? Good rythm! :D
2007-08-23 12:29:13 · answer #9 · answered by Yanu ; ) 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hummmm im gonna be honest. Im not gonna tell you yes just so you will vote for me. I thought it was kinda boring and im sure you could come up with better stuff since you said you love to right.
2007-08-23 11:52:07 · answer #10 · answered by ~*Becky*~ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I wasn't aware you could live without water ... or without life. Sorry that makes no sense. Pax - C
2007-08-23 11:50:04 · answer #11 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋