My novel about a giant white ball point pen (Moby Bic) was rejected by the publisher. How can I improve it?

Answer 1

My name is email should be first line. What better than the epic struggle between the eletter and the written one.

Answer 2

Great title. Getting straight to the point works best sometimes! Make sure you have enough paper, mate you need to be organised. If you feel like your ideas aren't flowing as freely as a fountain(pen), try to Click-a-bic to distract yourself. Keeping a firm grip on your topic helps too. Write me if you need help, I am good at drawing to conclusions!

Answer 3

Sounds like a cool premise, could be lots of fun. Without reading, no way to tell how you can improve it. BUT - you can self-publish. There are lots of options on the internet for that. Costs you $$$, buy if you think it is good enough to sell as is, you can make all the $$$ too.

Answer 4

change from a moy bic add a y after m space add wn to the o remove c from big then add a g at the the end of bic after that space creat another word from bic by removing b then add d before Ic then add k at the end(lol)

Answer 5

Maybe add a razor as a sidekick and call it Moby Bic and Schick...sounds more interesting.

Answer 6

maybe change what it's about...
Moby Hick?
Moby Nick?
Moby Chick?
Moby Schick?

:o)

Answer 7

Big white tongue???

Moby Lick?

Answer 8

Put the great white one back in and give him a small bit part,maybe that will jazz it up, or not!

Answer 9

Review it. More description, spelling, plot, and the ending...Just to name a few.

Answer 10

Maybe you should change the plot, and put more mystery in it, and more excitement.