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I Scream Helplessly into the Night

Darkness comes, the world freezes
in time,
through the window the
moonlight shines.
Not uttering a word nor daring to breath,
from the blackness it continues to seethe.
Standing there stalking, preying
on me,
the deadliest predator that I
cannot see
the thing I fear, the object of my fright
and I scream helplessly into the night.

2007-08-21 12:39:47 · 7 answers · asked by Viva La Alexander! 2 in Arts & Humanities Poetry

I wrote this poem about my fear of darkness

2007-08-21 12:54:23 · update #1

Continued

Is it moving, where is
it now?
I want to run but suddenly don't
know how.
Something hits my window, makes me jump
to my right something goes thump.
But it doesn't move, it stays out
of sight
as I scream helplessly into the night.

2007-08-21 13:18:18 · update #2

7 answers

I like it. It sends images into my mind of something sinister lurking just out of sight waiting for the right moment to pounce. That thing might be animal or human, or it could be something feared that might be inanimate, such as stage fright just before standing in front of ten thousand people and reciting the poem. Or maybe it's just fear of the darkness. It leaves that determination to the reader. Good job.

2007-08-21 12:51:11 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0 0

I like it and now am scared too, continue ading more and I'll read again afterwards.

2007-08-21 19:46:44 · answer #2 · answered by bEiNg DiScIpLiNeD 5 · 1 0

i think if you wrote more there would be too much lik it wouldent leave you on a cliff hanger its really good though

2007-08-21 19:49:27 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

Wow!
This poem is great!
There is no doubt about it,
That your ending will be great!
If you decide to add more!

2007-08-21 20:02:18 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

Hmm...this sounds familiar...VERY familiar. Is this a copy?

2007-08-21 22:46:53 · answer #5 · answered by Darkness.will.unleash.the.realm 2 · 0 0

i liked it add more to it

2007-08-21 19:48:03 · answer #6 · answered by I_wuv_you! hehe 3 · 0 0

Yes, please continue! It's a beautiful piece!

2007-08-21 20:00:31 · answer #7 · answered by prazegrl7 2 · 0 0

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