girl vampire 9in love with vampire hunter son
2007-08-21 08:20:58 · 2 answers · asked by Lyra Silvertongue 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
ooh, maybe a werewolf!
2007-08-21 08:21:16 · update #1
Well, it's about a girl vampire(diet-undecided)
who once looking into peoples eyes, can see all that they have seen. kinda like the Cullens-loosely based. she falls in love with a human/maybe werewolf. Complications ensue.
2007-08-21 08:32:04 · update #2
To the hellish PAX-C. I havent started the story, asnd i said the character's power was loosely based on the cullens idea of where the power originates! also, i have only ever read the twilight series. where do you get off telling me all that critiscism when you refuse to say what books, if any!, you have written.
2007-08-21 08:58:03 · update #3
Sounds like you hv the germ of an idea for a good story!Give me some more to go w/&maybe I can point you in the right direction!TL
P.S.I write vampire stories too,among other charcters
2007-08-21 08:30:11 · answer #1 · answered by TL 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You need a lot more tweaking. Quite honestly, it is always a very bad idea to state that your book is going to be "sort of" like an existing book. That would make an agent or editor or publisher very uncomfortable regarding the book's originality. It looks to me like you took Stephanie Meyer's books, mixed them with Laurell K Hamilton's, changed the sex of the vampire hunter and came up with your own story. Not nearly original enough. These books are very well known in the industry and upon reading your query letter, you would get slush piled while the agent or publisher went on through other queries to search for more original ideas. From the slush pile, a clerical type person would eventually get around to sending you a form rejection. You have to be fresh and original. There is just too much of this genre out there. Yes, publishers and agents are looking for it and yes they want it, but they want something new and original - not a rework of something they already have.
The problem as I see it is that you haven't done character studies. A girl vampire who can read people's minds isn't a character study. It should take you a week or more just to write a good analysis of that character and really flesh her out (no pun intended). When you have done so, or as you are doing so, original ideas should start to come to you.
And then a good strong outline that is more than just "trouble ensues" will gel those ideas into a plot.
It needs a lot of work. Good luck. Pax - C
2007-08-21 15:46:03 · answer #2 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋