where do i put the commas in this sentence? (its for an essay)
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish the only thing it told about were his thoughts and his pains and as a reader I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
thank u soo much i have to do summer reading and write a personal opinion essay
2007-08-19 14:12:54 · 10 answers · asked by wakeupcall4 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
The section in which Santiago was trying to pull in the fish on his boat only described his thoughts and his pains. As a reader, I enjoy more action than that part contained.
Or just put commas after "fish" and "pains" and maybe "reader."
Woot. :)
2007-08-19 14:23:41 · answer #1 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts and his pains, and as a reader, I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
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2007-08-20 10:45:53 · answer #2 · answered by Arvelyn A 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts and his pains and as a reader I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
This is a run on sentence by the way. try turning it into two sentences!
2007-08-19 21:47:15 · answer #3 · answered by BlahBlahBlah 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only things that was talked about were his thoughts and his pains. As a reader, I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
I edited it a little, if you don't like it, that's okay, I just think it flows a little better this way.
2007-08-19 21:38:04 · answer #4 · answered by PuppyLuv 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat, trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts and his pains, and, as a reader, I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
2007-08-19 21:32:11 · answer #5 · answered by MICHAEL R 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts and pains. As a reader, I enjoy more action than mere descriptions.
2007-08-19 21:23:13 · answer #6 · answered by gateach 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts, and his pains, and as a reader I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
2007-08-19 21:20:55 · answer #7 · answered by Pants in a Pear Tree 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told about were his thoughts and his pains, and as a reader I enjoy more action than just descriptions.
or
When Santiago was out on his boat trying to pull in the fish, the only thing it told "him" about were his thoughts and his pains, and as a reader "he" enjoy more action than just descriptiojns.
2007-08-19 21:22:58 · answer #8 · answered by KoreanChick 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a comma after fish and pains
2007-08-19 21:18:28 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
put a comma after "pains and" and after "reader".
2007-08-19 21:22:58 · answer #10 · answered by grumpy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋