I wrote this poem. I think I'm going to call it "Say Goodbye"?

Question

I look at you today
You're going away
You won't be there tomorrow
I don't want you to go
I look you in the eye
And I'm trying not to cry
Are you going to fly away tonight
Don't go, hold tight
Night after night I watch you
You breathe in and out, but is it really you
Or is it a machine giving you life
The silence is killing me, it's like a knife
I miss your laugh, your smile
The nurse tells me to go, but I'm going to stay for a while
I need to tell you that I love you
But is the message getting through
Can you hear me
Can you feel me
I need to tell you that I'm sorry that I never got the chance to tell you when we were face to face
That you saved me and showed me grace
I want to hold you one more
Then the doctor comes through the door
He said you were running out of time
And that your last few moments were mine
I held your hand
I told you goodbye and
That I would see you again
I love you, my friend
You died that day
And away from me you'd stay

I watched them take you away
And again I say
I love you
What more could I do
I cried
And I told you goodbye
I'll miss you my friend
And that...was your end


This isn't about anybody in particular. I just got bored.

Yeah sorry I didn't realize it at the time but that is the name of a song by Skillet

Answer 1

I think this is one of the best poems I have heard on this site. I think you have a lot of talent. I hope you keep on writing cuz these kind of poems get published in books and in other places on the internet. Good Luck!!!!!!

Answer 2

Please...someone stick a fork in my eyeball. I think some girl in my junior year creative writing class wrote the same thing 10 years ago.

This is the reason I'm glad I never went into teaching. I couldn't sit and critique this kind of tripe year after year.

Now I know why teachers are the #1 alcoholics in the country.

I can arrange for the two of you to be together again...rather quickly I might add.

Answer 3

This makes me think of of the poetry area here. We shop dropping contributors of the orchestra and, earlier long, you would be taking part in a solo for me, on account that i'm no longer lots of a poet. additionally, the symphony of existence. Our worldwide is broken and desires our help. solid, thrilling, writing, Koye. i think of you're marvelous.

Answer 4

Very end of Doctor Who season 2. I like it

Answer 5

This was rather good i enjoyed it, even though its terribly sad.
It was extremely good, actually. I really loved it. you are extremely talented. A great poet.
Keep Writting!

Answer 6

is thta th eonly poem with thta name

Answer 7

sounds pretty good so good on ya plus the title suit!!!!( -;

Answer 8

its good