The Poetry Effect
The words in the lines
Weaving through to make a rhyme
Through the ever leaving time
We pass into the future
Emotions, words in poems
Your heart on your paper
Bringing together
The times of your life
The ink in your pen
Passes to the paper and the past
So we pass also, writer and reader
Moving forward through these lines
Writing words sharing life
The words pass to the reader
For a moment two beats are one
As we read their heart
Heartbeat on paper
Beating on and on
Through time and through others
Carry these words on our paper
2007-08-18 13:51:18 · 9 answers · asked by shadow_knight150 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
not bad,could use more feeling,keep at it.
2007-08-18 14:02:04 · answer #1 · answered by notsohardtofigure 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I know how it feels to become inspired after seeing art somebody else has created (or tried to create.) In this instance, I appreciate your empathy and desire to emulate but am guessing there wasn't much to emulate. Hence, you failed. I'm thinking if you had read something good on this site today your effort would have been much more inspired. Don't blame yourself. This was not a good day on Yahoo! Answers poetry category.
2007-08-21 23:39:20 · answer #2 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree more feeling however I get what your saying I always wanted to share my little lyrical based paragraphs with someone of the opposite sex(sorry off topic)That is what poetry is your raw emotion on paper.
2007-08-18 21:09:59 · answer #3 · answered by nicole 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all. Especially since it's obviously impromptu; that is, you didn't spend a lot of time on it, and you were inspired by others. Sometimes, that type of poetry can be a winner!
2007-08-18 22:02:39 · answer #4 · answered by gldjns 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its nice i like it and u did a good job for just writing a poem the time keep it up and u will be a great poet someday.
2007-08-18 22:04:17 · answer #5 · answered by sexy kath 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is great. I think it's pretty deep, the connectedness of all that is required to create, whether it be a painting, sculpture, poem and how it effects others.
2007-08-18 21:08:01 · answer #6 · answered by *JC* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it.
kinda deep...(thats a good thing)
good job=]]
2007-08-18 21:24:15 · answer #7 · answered by Kandice 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1 WORD=WOW!
2007-08-19 05:24:04 · answer #8 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
!!!!!!!!!!!!
2007-08-18 21:04:01 · answer #9 · answered by . 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋