how do you like my story idea?

Question

Ok, I want to write like Dav Pilkey's The Adventures of Captain Underpants but I write to short. Who can help me get more chapters and more pages. basically, my story is chap 1-intro chap 2-fighting chap 3-end. please help! oh and do you like my this story idea?There were two boys who accidentally knocked a magic necklance that a teacher brought in Chinatown. She kept it in her box. The shopkeeper says that in ancient times. A good king died and people had a ceremony. An woman dropped her necklance into a fire(bonfire) and when she took it out, she became a firegirl(like the human torch) and a person finally defeated her. It is beleived that when the evil king lost the war and died to the good king, the evil king haunted the fire. Til now, the evil and his servant lives in a jungle making this evil necklances and selling it in Chinatown. So, that was the story(as the teacher said) Meanwhile, the necklance floates to the two boys classmate's house . Check additinoal details.

She became a fire girl. Now, it is up to Mozzie and Sam to defeat her and some very bad shooting stars that give her power. Then, Moz and Sam goes on a deadly duel with the evil emperor and finds out that the person who killed the first firegirl was somehow related to them. Then, I will do a another story. This is like a squel. Or do you think it would be good if I write a mystery story? like maybe the teacher is keeping some powers and we suspect her andd it is actually Amy or something like Harry Potter and the socerer's stone?

Answer 1

It sounds to me like you are stringing together all the books you like and copying them. DON"T. You need original ideas, original characters, lots of characterization. a good strong plot and lots of good subplots and backstories. You also need to learn how to spell and write decent sentences. A lot of it doesn't make much sense. Do your homework first. Do your character studies and write your outline. Right now I just see a whole bunch of disjointed thoughts with very little plot to hold them together.

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Answer 2

wow i'm sorry but you really need a main plot this seems like its gunna be way to confusing! You need to organize your thoughts and pick a main plot line a few main characters and start a new story or try taking some characters from this one and making it simpler. Sorry

Oh and if your having writers block or you want to add more to your story try writing your idead down on paper
for writers block i always take a blank sheet of paper and just write down whatever comes to mind it helps get your brain moving and thinking about different things try it it works

Answer 3

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Answer 4

I don't think this is the best idea, i'm not really into those things, try something different