God
God Please!
bring home 'forth to me!
a bandage for my suffering......
I plead!
I beg!
I pray aloud!?!?!?!?
but,
what's
it
for?
My faith
denounced.............
2007-08-14 16:53:41 · 13 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I like the dramatic pauses.
or
do
you press
the
enter
button
too
much...?
I'm kidding, I thought it was well written, with lots of emotion. If I was a emo-Simon Cowell I would say, "MY GOD, it was beautiful, you sure do know what you are doing, keep up the good work, and see you next week, babe." But I'm not Simon Cowell, or emo. I, however like the religious prospect of it, and also I like how you question what is faith FOR, most people question what it IS.
Very interesting, and great job. I felt very inthrawled for the time it lasted.
2007-08-14 17:43:54 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
I plead!
I beg!
I pray aloud!
All to no avail.
The tears flow as molten lead
hot and heavy
in your head
I've told you once
I've told you twice
you haven't heard me
as well as the mice
God was made by man
to justify being cruel
to the ruthless passes
rule
You be crazy
talking that sh*t
as soon as you say god
you take a hit
get honest
get straight
get true
leave god alone
god can't hurt you
2007-08-15 02:30:04 · answer #2 · answered by bondioli22 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Shad...You lost me! "bring home forth to me"? ? You tried to use the extended line breaks to fill in what you felt...but your comments were skeletal...I'm sure there was more to be said...or what you had to say could have been tighter...but here it is without the spaces:
God,God Please!
bring home 'forth to me!
a bandage for my suffering......
I plead! I beg! I pray aloud!
but, what's it for?
My faith denounced.............
...looks a little weak without the line breaks, huh? You've written some very, very good poems...I don't think this qualifies as one of them...but I still like your others.
keep writing
2007-08-18 02:12:16 · answer #3 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
This poem here is interesting
it indeeds talks here on God
this is also like a prayer
When it starts off like Dear God
I often say that
when I pray
2007-08-15 10:06:41 · answer #4 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Shad sweetie, there's just not enough content in here for me to follow you.
Margot
2007-08-19 16:17:15 · answer #5 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
God
Dog
Anyway
You
Spell
IT
Still
Man's
BEST
FRIEND!!!
Don't know who said it, but I love it. Loved your poem too, of course. Did this catch your attention, too, written like this?
2007-08-15 10:13:38 · answer #6 · answered by dawnUSA 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is a short but interesting piece.
2007-08-15 00:17:23 · answer #7 · answered by Argent 4 · 3⤊ 1⤋
One name can cure many illness even european scientist aware of this.
2007-08-15 02:58:57 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
very thought provoking...but i dnt think he answers poems...but if you want t denounce him that is your option...please remember...IF you are a believer..its the devils work..keep praying...beam me up scottie
2007-08-15 00:42:15 · answer #9 · answered by eb_guy 3 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Very short, but very good.
2007-08-15 00:18:15 · answer #10 · answered by Juefawn™ 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋