The second hand was dying. . .
Or so I thought to be.
The world was on a stand-still,
Nightmares won't set me free
Light crept along the border
And just within times reach-
My hand cast out few hopes
To an ever-ebbing beach
Yet patience is a virtue
Time has yet to learn.
Pulling tricks upon your mind
Find quite hard to discern
So quietly, just wait for it
And foretell this if you must,
But unattained triumph
Is a thing you shouldn't trust
For now with every thought
And each new foggy dream. . .
You might discover, that
Hope is not what it may seem.
any ideas for a title/what do you think??? =]thanks.
2007-08-13 14:28:45 · 4 answers · asked by Em 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Your poem is absolutely brilliant. You are extremely talented and I think the world of your writing. This poem has a unique style and lots of creativity throughout. You definitely made this poem yours, which makes it stand out from others. Keep your head up. I think you will go very far if you keep on believing. You did a good job. Keep it up, superstar!!
2007-08-13 15:21:39 · answer #1 · answered by djb32067433_1 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice poem. It has great rhythym and structure. I agree with "Time will tell", I thought of "Silent thoughts". In the end, it's really you that has to come up with it, because only you can really know the message you ment to deliver.
Us readers, interpret as we wish.
2007-08-13 15:06:54 · answer #2 · answered by LexiHeart 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it, the lines flow together like water down a hill, it was very well written. If I had to name it, I'd probably call it something like "Time Will Tell". Have a star to go with it.
2007-08-13 14:35:47 · answer #3 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I didn't like it. It just sounded like random lines that rhymed, and nothing more. It should have a meaning, one that you must search for to find, but is always there so you CAN find it.
Didn't like it, but that's just me!
2007-08-13 16:38:04 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋