Can someone improve my story for me? Only serious answeres please.?

Question

I need someone to improve my story for me. IM me at realxdragonxfire to get my story. The length of my story is 6 chapters, and about 55 pages. It’s story is about a girl who doesn't know her biological mother and lives with her biological father. She falls in love with a boy and secretly date him, without her father knowing for about 2 years. Then the father finds out that they have been dating after the girl became pregnant. The father gets mad and doesn't like his daughter's boyfriend. Later, they get along after the girl fakes her death. Also, don't give me those answers that make me use my creatitivity because I've tried useing my creatitivity and it didn't work. Just give me straight forward answers. Answers like 'do this' answers. Please and thank you.

Answer 1

Your story is done already? If it is, you should go back and ask questions like, "Does this make sense?" or "Would this really happen?" or "Would she really talk like that?" Things like that.

Then, clear away all your positive thoughts and look at the story from a super-critical point of view. Point out any little problem you see. Don't do this while you're writing the story, or it will be no fun.

Sounds like a pretty long story (or a pretty short book, depending on how you look at it) so I wouldn't have time to go over the whole thing for you. So I hope my advice helps. Good luck!!