Story idea - opinions please?

Question

Okay, so I've decided to write a story and I have an idea, I just need some honest opinons :]

I'm thinking that theres an 18 year old girl living in Florida who's all excited for her summer of her Senior year but when school ends her parents break the news to her that they signed her up to be a counselor at a camp all the way up in Maine for 8 weeks. Her entire summer! She is used to getting whatever she wants coming from a wealthy family, so her parents want to teach her what hard work is and what it means to earn your own money. She has to leave behind her friends, and her perfect boyfriend she was looking forward to spending a lot of time with over the summer.
But, she has no choice. She'd be leaving right away.
And the story continues where she's at camp, starts out hating working there and working with all of the little "brats" of campers, sleeping in a smelly old cabin, and having to miss out on all the fun of her summer!
Then things begin to change when (cont.)

she meets a boy counselor there who is a different kind of guy than the ones back home that she's used to. And it's a lot about learning about working for herself, becoming independant. And more importantly about her personal decisions of what she wants to do about this boy, she has a boyfriend back home who she really likes - but this guy seems "perfect" and she just cant get over him.

I don't know if the story is any good, but it might be interesting to see if she goes for this guy and has a summer camp romance, and then doesnt tell her boyfriend back home? And what happens in general between all of the counselors she meets at camp - like girl ones that become her friends & enemies.

What do you think? Please & Thank you!
No nasty comments please. :]

Answer 1

I like it. I definitely think it has potential. It would be very cool if you explored the differences between the types of people she knows back home and the type of people she meets at camp. Definitely write it!

Also, as to what newyorkgal71 said about not putting your ideas on a public website? I wouldn't worry about it too much... ideas are always floating around. Even if someone DID take your idea, their story would still be so different from yours it's incredible. It's not the IDEAS that make a story, it's the WORDS.

Answer 2

Yes, I'd read it. Make sure you make it evident of HOW Caleb died, WHERE it was, etc. Nobody wants any cliffhangers. However, I realize you didn't give it away (I wouldn't either!) I'm just reminding you. Now, here's a debatable topic-- how old should Caleb be? I personally think he should stay four, because it doesn't make sense how he ages if he's dead. Also, I think if there were a hidden message maybe, and Caleb knew about it, perhaps it'd be harder for her to figure out, since he's only four. Or if that's not the case, I think he should stay four, because you said he shows her how to be a child again. Well, who better to do so than a child? I think that part would be developed much easier, and it would make more sense, if he were four. Good job, love the idea! :)

Answer 3

Try and make sure you write about how she is seeing both her boyfriend and the camp guy as perfect guys. Like as she is at camp she grows up a little and understand that the guy at home was not that perfect and how she sees what a real perfect guy is like.

You could also have family day at camp where her boyfriend comes to visit and how she deals with both guys at the same place at the same time..

And her parents giving her the option to come home early and how she decides not to and they are shocked that she has grown so much by being there..

Good Luck.

Answer 4

not bad, but there's no conflict. i'm sorry but 18 is not a child, so she could say no to her parents. make the woman an actual child, like 15-16, and have her lazy parents actually have a turning moment that lets them know they can't parent thier child by sheer will alone.

she could be the passenger in a car accident, or kill a dog on the road. she could wreck an expensive family car. something serious, but not criminal. and i don't know if someone so spoiled can be a good counselor. send her to some form of community service--like habitat for humanity, or rebuilding new orleans. the conflicts could be that the mother doesn't want to send the girl away. maybe the father is cheating, and how dare he lecture anyone about responsibility? the girl doesn't respect either of her parents, so she spends most of the story trying to get out of work, or get away.

Answer 5

I want to give you my honest opinion so it can be of the most use to you, so please do not take offense at anything I say. It sounds like a story in which you can be very creative with, and I'm sure someone can publish it and another someone can read it. However, this isn't a very deep or inspiring story. I'm sure many of people have also written similar stories, and so if you still decide to write it, I would search to make sure someone can't accuse you of plagarizing their idea. The character sounds very whiney and spoiled and very uninteresting to read about. (A reader won't continue reading the story if they don't care what happens to the main character.)

It sounds like you have a good imagination which would be better spent on something else. Think up of another story...its what all writers do.

Best of luck!

Answer 6

Hmm...I think I've read something like this before. It's definitely a good idea, but I don't know how original it actually is. I could just be imagining that I've read a book like this before, so pursue it and see what happens! Good luck!

Answer 7

Honey, you should never, never, put your story ideas on a public website like this, other's may take your idea as their own.

Answer 8

Good story, but we have all heard it.

Maybe you should write more than you read!

Good Luck!