*I'm 14
*I have BAD writer's block when a topic is thrown @ me.
*I hate poetry sometimes, especially when I have to write it.
*I had to do an exaggerated poem/hyperbole.
*I know it sucks, so you don't have to tell me LOL...just say what I should change and if you thinks it's okay.
Heat
Blankets the atmosphere in haze;
Scorching as a stove.
It sets the pavements, the very streets ablaze
And it’s roving through the grove.
It melts each car
And roasts each tree.
Dissolves every candy bar,
Compels sunburns, third degree.
Melts down ice in a flash
And dehydrates every leaf.
Burns all the air to ash,
It’s the intolerable and absurd heat.
2007-08-12 15:22:29 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
yeah i understand
2007-08-12 15:28:42 · answer #1 · answered by нƐ∂ıɣƐн 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its very good. And I admire your bravery for having the courage to post it on here
2007-08-12 22:29:18 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think its u know not too bad. it would be great but the subject is sorta odddd.. so yeah but sounds fine. u dont need to change it
2007-08-12 22:29:58 · answer #3 · answered by Eat. Sleep. Run. ☼ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good, but sunburn doesn't go to 3rd degree; use first
2007-08-12 22:29:14 · answer #4 · answered by diannegoodwin@sbcglobal.net 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well thats pretty good.
Its a keeper (in my opinion)
2007-08-12 22:30:06 · answer #5 · answered by Ms. Thang 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i lked yor poem .
2007-08-12 22:27:48 · answer #6 · answered by sugar kane 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋