Little something off the top of the head. Nothing serious? Ok Uncle?

Question

I was free as I can be
till credit hit the scene
now freedoms lost
to credits cost
now I have to leave
Uncle Sam he knows my name
his finger points at me
were can I go
that he don't know
I pray you leave me be.

Hey sam just a little quickie off the top of my head. was drinking 10.5 beer.
I had alot more to say on the subject but I'm glad I didn't . I might clean it up and add to it. sssshhh!!! miss direction. lol

Answer 1

Skeeter my friend, where did you go...

I like where you are going and what you are attempting to say.
Re-read it and edit is all I'll say today.

Peace,
Sam

Answer 2

hmmm, try this for editing:

I was free as I could be
till credit hit the scene
now my freedom's lost
to credit's cost
and I fear I have to leave
Uncle Sam found out my name
And his finger points at me
were can I go
that he won't know
And want a piece of me.

kinda cute that way :)

keep writing

Answer 3

Don't worry

For your head...

All are safe save

For you...

At your prayer...

Serious is

Nothing...

OK...

Nothing is

Is very serious...!

Answer 4

Not to worry, he doesn't draft any more.