Pain, Rain & Music
Now he’s got the girl
And I’ve got the pain
He’s got the honey
And I’ve got the rain
He gets kisses
While I get insane
But I got music
Running round in my brain
Pain inspired to compose
Black and Decker prose
A rose is a rose
But ends in woes
Her voice is gone
Let my heart sing
Of the days of spring
She was everything
Now absence from me
I must drown in the sea
Let the wave cover my agony
My agony
When I rise again
From the depths
From the precepts
I must accept
My all alone steps
And it doesn’t matter
That I shatter the quiet
With a musical riot
Cause deep down inside
I just don’t buy it
Cause he’s got the girl
And I’ve got the pain
He’s got the honey
And I’ve got the rain…
2007-08-11 13:03:27 · 7 answers · asked by ignoramus_the_great 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
That was incredible. It made me miss my girlfriend. A poem that can make the reader feel is a good poem.
2007-08-11 17:18:59 · answer #1 · answered by energetikid 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good, nice rhythm. It very strongly exemplifies how painful a broken heart is. Write on! :-D
2007-08-11 20:15:57 · answer #2 · answered by Zeorus 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great. But it would be more fluent if you changed, running round in my brain, to running round my brain.
2007-08-11 20:08:11 · answer #3 · answered by Sarah N 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really deep, and it makes since and i like it
i think you got potential
2007-08-11 20:07:40 · answer #4 · answered by K®Ÿ§†ªl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was great. Are you a goth? Because I am.
2007-08-11 20:29:25 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow!!!!clap clap clap
2007-08-11 20:06:32 · answer #6 · answered by Christine N 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, can you say emo?... i'm just kidding. its really good.
2007-08-11 20:12:46 · answer #7 · answered by AznMzkn 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋