Starless Nights:
I see God most on starless nights
Meandering beneath the city lights
Holding the broken by the hands
Watching them lifted chance by chance
I see God most when He's there least
He's in the chaos, among the pleas
He's everything or nothing, but never between
He's everywhere we look, but nowhere we can see
On starless nights, I watch and wonder
If it should even matter
Whether God is here or gone
Either thought leaves me sadder
2007-08-11 11:28:21 · 21 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
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2007-08-11 11:33:45 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-02 03:15:40 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it a lot, but also agree the ending needs some more work. How about one last verse that leaves us with a little bit more hope, and which ties in with the beautiful images of the beginning? (In other words, in spite of the worlds shortcomings, you choose to still believe.)
2007-08-12 04:19:37 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
WONDERFUL I live where the city lights make it difficult to see stars and there are alot of homeless and prostitutes and drug sales about 1 mile away so it really touches home
2007-08-11 11:37:32 · answer #4 · answered by Southern Comfort 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Bravo
2007-08-11 11:31:59 · answer #5 · answered by Jussikah 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Almost there - the last verse needs more working on. On the whole, a good one! Keep it up.
2007-08-11 11:33:07 · answer #6 · answered by upyerjumper 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's very good. But "sadder" doesn't seem to fit much, I know it's supposed to go with "matter", but it doesn't work for me.
Other than that, I really loved it.
2007-08-11 11:33:12 · answer #7 · answered by LexiHeart 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice poem.....Very Interesting!!
2007-08-11 11:32:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
A Star for a Star,I know talent when I read it !!
2007-08-11 11:36:33 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
your poem is really beautiful! you should do something with it like submit it to your local newspaper
2007-08-11 11:34:17 · answer #10 · answered by spa224 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋