May we all live in harmony
Yoked in love and peace
Never forget a friendly face
And treasure those who's least
My time is short for this I know
Eternity's at the door
Intentions well, as I've been told
Senserity I adore
My feelings hurt easy when I am slammed
Eleventh hour approaching near
Life's handing out pain and poison
Vendication is all I hear
Isolated from the people
Not a reason to jerk a tear
Old school I miss, from time to time
Keep smiling through the fear.
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2007-08-11 08:01:43 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Yes I run the spell check and It comes back (no miss spelling found) done.
I am sorry that I have trouble spelling right. but the words are in my head.
please don't disregard the poem for my lack of ability.
2007-08-11 08:20:27 · update #1
I had a good poem slammed the other night for miss spelled words. again I'm sorry for my short comings.
2007-08-11 08:23:23 · update #2
I loved the sentiment. The heart of the poem is great. I have faced dying. It is a roller coaster of emotion. You did a great job of describing the ride.
2007-08-11 08:29:10 · answer #1 · answered by bsharpbflatbnatural 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great
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2007-08-11 15:09:35 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it starts off great. I think that last line needs something to go with it. It needs more clarification at the end as to what you fear. Also, senserity is spelled sincerity and vendication is vindication. I think your first four paragraphs are well written. Keep writing. It's a great form of self expression.
2007-08-11 15:18:08 · answer #3 · answered by golden sephiroth 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't worry too much about spellcheck.... you have poetic license. That means you can spell a word any way you like to achieve the effect you desire. Most who complain loudest about spelling are probably lousy at it to.
2007-08-11 17:41:28 · answer #4 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Did you run that through spell check?
2007-08-11 15:09:07 · answer #5 · answered by Miss Alexis 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋