Ode To Poe..... What do you think of this poem?

Question

Dark, decrepit, dreary damned night
Fills my bowels with stones of fright
My eyes shift from the left to the right
While shadows dance in the pale moonlight

No human should walk the earth at this hour
Per chance to meet some unearthly power
I watch, I listen, I dodge, I cower
While heart burns, stomach churns, and mouth tastes sour

The cold wind howls with evil glee
Anticipating my destiny
I know some spectre waits for me
To rend, to end mortality

I watch it standing up ahead
With fingers of bone and eyes of red
Beckoning me to join the dead
I change my path, with feet of lead

I begin to tremble and I can swear
If only in mind, there's something here
And I die in waiting, there's death in fear
Damned night be gone, glorious dawn appear

Answer 1

Okay...well, I love Poe...I think he was truly a genius, and I know pretty much all of his works...so, the question I have is, "how does what you wrote apply to Poe?" This is an "ode", right? Where, may I ask, do you even name him? I would suggest you look up examples of an "ode" so you can decide which type of ode you'd care to write...I'd recommend a Homeric Ode since you're talking on a personal level, but I guess you could do a Pindarc ode if you follow the rules. If you want to do a "parody piece" instead of an ode, then you'll need to copy his style, phrasing, etc. or even do a turn on one of his poems. If you want to do a "tribute to Poe", you can forget the rules of an ode, but you still need to at least mention his name in the body of the poem, or mention his works. I don't see Annabelle Lee, the Raven, or any Telltale Hearts, Murders in the Rouge Morgue, etc. You can't just write a poem about "spooky things" and say it's a tribute, ode, or anything else to Poe.
I admire your intent and perhaps some of your lines, but you need more than that when you write for Poe.

Here is an example of a "Poe parody" (so you don't think I'm talking out my backside):

Edgar Raven

Once upon a poem dreary
That made eyes so red and teary
Over a very famous tale without the slightest hint of gore
Poe’s poor poem that he’d been savin
About a dark and evil craven
That turned out to be a raven
Ravin’ about his lost Lenore
Who kept repeating a single phrase
Only that and nothing more

Ah distinctly I read later
How he’d thought the prognosticator
Was just some weird instigator
To do such knocking on his door
Yet when he let him enter
He did not fly to the center
And when perched was the preventer
Of his hoping for Lenore
Truly dark this tale of yore
Where the raven keeps repeating “nevermore”

And this true love tale so tragic
Had a hint of ancient magic
And it thrilled me filled me with fantastic images
I had never seen before
And to keep from ere repeating
How his heart just sat there beating
I jumped back with my fear retreating
And I barred my chamber door
Merely this and nothing more

And although I could go deeper
About this poem and it’s old keeper
And about our poor old Edgar’s
Radiant maiden named Lenore
I would rather here be ending
This poor parody by sending
My apologies for rending
Such a poem of timeless lore
Such a rare a radiant poem
Of his lost true love Lenore
Into pieces on my chamber floor
This I say and nothing more.


Kevin M. Sorbello

Answer 2

I didn't have trouble reading this like most poems I see on here that say something about Poe. Although there are some mess ups in this that I won't get into because I have to get off pretty soon.

I do like this. Good work.

Answer 3

In the last paragraph, the pattern gets a little off,

Which happens to me A LOT.

But I absolutely LOVED it.
It had energy.
I felt fear when I read it.

Continue writing, that was awesome.

Answer 4

so far the best poem ive read at yahoo answers

Answer 5

wow thats incredibly beautiful....I really like it flows very very well keep up the good work