Me, Your ID. What do you think of this poem?

Question

If orange were red
And red were blue
Would you look at me
If I said I was you

If the truth were a lie
And a lie were a joke
Could you tell my painting
By the stroke

Cause you plagiarize
And you stole from me
Now a lie you are
And shall ever be

When the sun gets mad
Orange turns to red
And the strokes on the canvas
Is where I bled

Now you are me
And I got what I’m due
And a joke is a joke
Cause I stole from you too

Answer 1

clever...

Answer 2

I like this one...but there are a few corrections you need to make..."could you pick out my painting by the style of my stroke" will correct both lines...in fact, here's how I'd edit your poem...

If orange were red
And red were blue
Would you look at me
If I said I was you

If the truth were a lie
And a lie were a joke
Could you pick out my painting
By the style of my stroke

Think you could plagiarize
Steal something from me
You're a cheat and a liar
And you always will be

When the sun gets mad
Its orange turns red
Those strokes on the canvas
Are the life that I bled

Now you are me
And I got what I’m due
And revenge is this joke:
I stole from you too


I tried to keep the lines pretty much the way you had them and only edited enough to correct the beat and consolidate meaning and flow. Even if this is not how you would have made the final edit, I hope it at least gives you some ideas.

keep writing...the poem was good.

Answer 3

Just kind of a waste of time don't you think? And then to write a "poem" about it?

Answer 4

I like it cute yet meaningful too...good job