"I poison my lips with anger and hatred, and so do my life suffer with revengeful attacks"..
2007-08-10 16:52:02 · 12 answers · asked by Angelica 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Well...two things:
1. "quotes" are things said by someone that others felt significant enough to remember...so it's a bit pretentious to "write" your own quote :)
2. If you wanted to say what I think you wanted to say, I'd consider editing it so it looked like this:
"I poison my lips with anger and hatred, and suffer my life with revengeful attacks."
your meaning has depth...keep it concise and maybe it "will" be quoted :)
2007-08-10 18:47:23 · answer #1 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i could. no count what. As of suitable now, I purely write for myself. Writing is my get away from fact into the deep nation-states of my techniques. despite if i desperate to be revealed at some point and became rejected via all or if I by no ability bought a replica, i could shop writing. Writing keeps me sane. it somewhat is exceptionally plenty the top of the tale. If i did no longer have writing, i could probably finally end up locked away for the loopy issues my techniques comes up with! So yeah, i could by no ability supply up writing, no count the cost :)
2016-10-02 02:12:33 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
tood, but I think you can change "revengeful attacks to remorseful attacks" at least it is not so strong. But with your anger and hatred, well your vengeance is really showing.
2007-08-10 19:05:48 · answer #3 · answered by Erase Program Read Only Memory 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's alot of truth in your quote! If you spew hatred others
will recoil in anger and fight back; which will affect your life
in a negative way. Great quote Angelica..
2007-08-10 17:18:32 · answer #4 · answered by Sushigreen 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Satisfactory for me. It's like that quote talks about a person who hates the whole world.
2007-08-10 20:13:13 · answer #5 · answered by teenrita 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Take no offence, let it only penetrate you constructively but I must inform you.....your quote sucks.
2007-08-10 16:58:44 · answer #6 · answered by sharpie 3 · 4⤊ 0⤋
the wording sounds retarded to be honest.
it sounds like you're trying to be old english or something and failing.
fix it
edit: i really don't like the imagery or whatever either.
2007-08-10 16:56:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
oh my god, whats your age
this maturity at this age
keep going " a next charles dickens " in the making
2007-08-10 16:58:07 · answer #8 · answered by angelboy_23 2 · 0⤊ 4⤋
W0W THATS PRETTY C00L!!! ARE Y0U SURE U MADE iT UP L0LZ JK YEA iTS G00D!!
2007-08-10 16:58:29 · answer #9 · answered by ily:) 2 · 0⤊ 4⤋
WOW that's good!!! You should write more poems
2007-08-10 16:57:16 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 5⤋