you had died
i then cried.
"& that is that"
as you spat.
we had exchanged such harsh words,
then i hit you with the car door.
i then came back 'round again
to hit you full on with the front end.
now i'm filled with regret
for now i have no one else
TO HIT!
Title: intoxicated love
2007-08-10 14:59:08 · 3 answers · asked by Anarchist Skywalker 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
hmmm, I liked your other one far more...straight from the brain poems work sometimes...sometimes they don't...this time was the latter. It was worth a try though.
keep writing
2007-08-11 17:27:38 · answer #1 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Brain? sounds more like it's comming from ur @$$! I'm just kidding. It's pretty good u should try and get some of ur stuff published!
2007-08-10 23:11:49 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Elvis, Elvis, let me be
Keep your pelvis far from me!!!
now does that makes sense cuz what you put here Elvis, doesn't. and on the other poem that Dark posted, I guess you aren't one of those who can appreciate good writing!!
2007-08-10 22:33:06 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋