"THE LONELY AMOEBA"
I Am,
Innocent Blood Spilled
An Acid-Washed Dream
Fear In A Victims Eye
I Am,
What You Cannot Uncreate
The Unforgivable Act
An Emptied Womb
I AM, Yours Forever, A mistake.
2007-08-10 14:11:54 · 6 answers · asked by Anarchist Skywalker 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
This poem almost made me cry. It's very beautiful. I think it could describe an abortion, as one of the answerers here said, but, I also think it could describe a number of things. Even situations with your parents depending on your view on it. It's very heart-felt and it grasps the reader from the the first line. "I am..." is always a good way to begin a poem simply because it grasps peoples attention and they are curious to know what you are. It paints a very good image and uses a plentiful amount of imagery which is vital in order to make a poem a success. I think you went all out and used all elements of poetry to make this poem a complete success. Keep writing!
2007-08-10 14:42:38 · answer #1 · answered by nocries121 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like the poem...I'd change the title though...here's a thought, how about "Forever Yours"...since that's the actual point of the poem? Just a thought.
nicely done
keep writing
2007-08-12 00:25:41 · answer #2 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm not fond of the title, but the work itself is nice. It makes me think of an abortion, but I can see a few other interpretations held with-in those lines.
2007-08-10 21:56:07 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You should send it to the Right to Life Organization. It describes an abortion and the after effects rather well, if you meant it to or not..
2007-08-10 21:22:22 · answer #4 · answered by cowboy 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Don't care for the title. You made me imagine evil...self made but not self actualized evil. Human despair without redemption...the fallen.
2007-08-10 21:23:14 · answer #5 · answered by Lizbiz 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Well, you made me read three or four times. Which is good.
2007-08-10 21:40:50 · answer #6 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋