fly fly male butterfly
until your wings gonna die
there is a reason for it
there is a season of guilt
2007-08-10 05:45:37 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Please don't take offense! I can tell there is a lot of an emotion in the poem; however I don’t believe you are executing it well.
fly fly male butterfly (seems to be about a beautiful man)
Until your wings gonna die (what does wing refer to? It’s beauty, its freedom, its use to be a beautiful lair??)
There is a reason for it (a reason…like karma)
There is a season of guilt (this is well written line)
Overall it is unique however amateur. It has a lot of potential.
The last two lines, IT, and GUILT don’t rhyme. Trying writing it and then saying it. You really have talent, just work on it to improve. You can always extend your poem. It’s a great start, just work with it.
2007-08-10 06:04:55 · answer #1 · answered by Amanda Ann 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you talking about an unmarried man whose freedom ends at marriage, and his season of "guilt" would be all the different women he has before his is married?
Note to author: I know a lot of male butterflies that have no season of guilt. It is just fly, Baby, fly.
2007-08-10 14:40:05 · answer #2 · answered by bsharpbflatbnatural 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is no time for guilt, for we have but one day in the Sun.
2007-08-10 16:27:22 · answer #3 · answered by tyler durden Oƒƒicial 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
metamorphosis,
to end in sexual exhaustion.
to mate with one,,,
so it may carry on again...
just a guess..need to title it,to give one something to relate to or go by.....don't understand the guilt thing...
d.
2007-08-10 15:37:34 · answer #4 · answered by dorian 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is not very well done. last two lines don't rhyme, wings don't die...I just don't get the message...if there is one...sorry.
2007-08-11 23:41:03 · answer #5 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
is okay for a cild but an older peson vocabulay should b mre mature
2007-08-10 13:56:19 · answer #6 · answered by *?{Emie}?* 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Hilarious. I hope he's not hurt too bad.
2007-08-10 15:07:49 · answer #7 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
kinda weird
2007-08-10 12:52:42 · answer #8 · answered by Dusti-n-Jessie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting.......but more in the weird way.
2007-08-10 13:15:24 · answer #9 · answered by Rachel H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
meh
2007-08-10 12:52:53 · answer #10 · answered by devinthedragon 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋