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Speak Up!
Small voices trembling,
Bringing forward offerings of verse,
Laid before the minion, a clipped council,
Cloaked, with their terse bursts of malcontent,
Then a maiden fair,
With shining jewel of prose profound,
At the sepulcher of mediocrity,
Shows a light quite rare and beautiful,
Crackling cheeks fight back smiles,
Gathering stars and thumbs, dusty, unspent,
As she speaks her rhyming crescendo,
Cold hearts deny their joy no more, in tears.
*****
2007-08-09 10:42:56 · 12 answers · asked by TD Euwaite? 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Well done T.D. I think most of your work is well done and you hang here just to toy with everyone.
2007-08-09 12:26:11 · answer #1 · answered by The Dark Prince 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This one's actually quite moving, and obviously written from the heart, and not the head. Good Job!
This piece is in stark contrast to my rotten day at work, and I appreciate anything that is excellent and well done. It took my mind off my concerns for a while, and that is certainly beneficial.
2007-08-09 18:34:49 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's beautiful and I can relate. I just wish I were the maiden fair who finally showed "a light quite rare and beautiful."
Have you checked out criticalpoet.com?
The quality of what you write belongs there, at the very least.
Margot
2007-08-09 17:49:05 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I had a shiny jewel of prose profound, once.
...but I spent it on a jawbreaker...
I'm such a sucker! What can I say?
I'll be here all week, three shows a night!
...just for you, a bright little star!
2007-08-09 18:04:03 · answer #4 · answered by The Dark Phool 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Crackling cheeks fight back smiles
Great line. Wonderful.
This is really good TD.
2007-08-09 18:11:37 · answer #5 · answered by Todd 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You are truly an artist of the mind using words instead of a brush.
2007-08-09 18:12:13 · answer #6 · answered by bsharpbflatbnatural 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry I don't understand a whole buncha words, and I don't like mini-onions. They are not a good cash crop!
2007-08-09 20:57:23 · answer #7 · answered by Farmer & Granny Crabtree 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
With Cinnamon's "Morning" and this, I think I have read the best of today's work here. It has been a great day.
2007-08-09 18:02:27 · answer #8 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
sounds like one of the Legend of Zelda characters.
2007-08-09 18:00:38 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Awww TD ... thanks for writing a poem about me. *blows kisses*
Seriously, this is beautiful and I really think it's the best piece of yours that I've read.
2007-08-09 21:28:51 · answer #10 · answered by Cinnibuns 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋