What do you think of my poem?

Question

I wonder what’ll happen next,
I wonder who I’ll meet.
Who will leave me behind?
Who will catch me when I face defeat?

The road is long and winding,
The end of the book not in sight.
Life continues on,
And I’m wishing with all my might.

Let me live a day longer,
Let me change someone in a good way,
I hope I’m doing things right,
Oh, how I pray.

Let my life be worth it,
Let me live, just for today.
I hope I do some good,
Oh, how I pray.

This life can be so short,
How much can we do?
When you’ll always have yourself,
There’s only so much you can lose.

I hold out my hand,
Won’t you take it?
I offer you my help,
Take it as you see fit.

I wonder how much time we have,
I wonder if it’s enough to make a change.
Maybe we’re not supposed to do it all in one lifetime,
Maybe we have to rely on others to pass on the exchange.

The road is long and winding,
The end of the book not in sight.
What if we get it all wrong?
All these things I wonder alone at night.

There’s only so much to lose,
But oh so much to gain.
I pray I can get this life right,
I’ll have to take it step by step and page by page.

Answer 1

Hello ,


I have to say that that poem is the most truthful poem i have ever heard ! . It expressed your feeling's and the way you think . I love it !

Answer 2

I like the message of your poem, but I'm questioning the form. It's definitely free verse, however, you're attempting to rhyme. If you rhyme, I think you should also have rhythm. Take your very last line, for example. There's no corresponding rhyme in that one, but when I read it, I want to add another "by page".
"I'll have to take it step by step and page by page by page." Also, some of your lines are way too long. Free verse is not one of my favorite poetic forms. To me, it sounds too much like narrative. It needs some work, but I like the message.

Answer 3

Simply, it’s brilliant. I really had a good feeling after reading it.. It’s true that poems are like mirrors, they reveal feelings. Only a good poem reflects the poets feelings.. The feelings s/he wants to convey.. And yours is a very good one..

Keep it up :)

Answer 4

i think its great.i like pomes and yours is fantastic.you r very talented,maybe you should write a book:)
good luck

Answer 5

I like it, it's really good! Keep writing!

Answer 6

like it --too long for me though