its a acrostic on makeup and im in year 8
Makeup
An everyday essential in a girl’s life
Kohl black eyeliner
Eyes coated in mascara
Under the layer of foundation
Peoples true beauty lies.
2007-08-03 18:30:52 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It's actually quite good! Todd's right, add the apostrophe in "Peoples" to make it the possesive form: "People's". The use of a single word like "Makeup" at the beginning doubles as the start and the title...clever girl! It also sets up the entire poem and you did a remarkable job.
you did a really, really good job! It doesn't sound contrived and it uses the letters effectively without being too wordy. I'd give you an "A"
2007-08-04 15:13:09 · answer #1 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you diid a good job. Here's what was good here:
Kohi black eyeliner: Specificity is always better than general. I know you needed the K, but it's a good choice to use a specific type here. The rest of it is good. I'm happy that you put an epiphany of sorts on the P.
Put an apostrophe before the s in Peoples,
I think it will work very well for an assignment.
2007-08-04 08:22:39 · answer #2 · answered by Todd 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'm a published poet myself and in my opinion, that poem is ok. What is your assignment about?
2007-08-04 01:34:44 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋