I found myself lost in the dark.
I was blind so I followed my heart.
Missing marks was the scary part.
But I didn't give up the fight.
Even though I had no sight.
Suddenly there was hope a glimmer of light.
2007-08-03 04:11:55 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
The title is The Light in The Darkness.
2007-08-03 04:12:55 · update #1
You have a good foundation... but I would like to see you flesh it out a little.... give it a little more length and depth... but overall a good effort.
2007-08-03 04:15:20 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes it was very good and i feel that it symbolizes a blind mans journey through the crooked world and how we should always follow our hearts.
2007-08-03 11:17:56 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ok it could use another line or two. It's ok, you just need a few things that i just can't put my finger on.
2007-08-03 11:33:19 · answer #3 · answered by NightWalker97 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it its got a nice flow
2007-08-03 12:10:54 · answer #4 · answered by Te 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its beautiful.
You are conveying the idea clearly.
Good job!
2007-08-03 11:14:50 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
so cerebral, your reader have at least 5 senses, assault them by providing images.
2007-08-03 11:59:23 · answer #6 · answered by mountain dew 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
dark and heart don't rhyme, but I still like it.
2007-08-03 11:15:11 · answer #7 · answered by Natasha W 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
why yes i do,
very inspiring and nice.
Good work!
2007-08-03 11:15:18 · answer #8 · answered by Sunshine 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yes, keep it up May God help you.
2007-08-03 11:29:55 · answer #9 · answered by Rana 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
No
2007-08-03 11:19:38 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋