My poem, Where's my angel, comments?

Question

I know there’s something, that I do not see
But somehow I feel it, all around me
It gives me warm feelings, when I act really good
As I get older, I now act as I should

It might be my age, that I am starting to feel
Helping my soul, I am trying to heal
When I now sleep, beside my new wife
I do remember, those times in my life

I wasn’t perfect, I did all the things
That being young, we just called them flings
My mind wasn’t molded, I didn’t think clearly
I think I hurt people, that I loved real dearly

I heard of angels, all bright with a glow
If they were here, wouldn't I know
I’ve heard some stories, more good then are bad
They pray for our souls and never get mad

Maybe sometime, someday or someplace
I’ll meet my angel, she’ll show her face
Something inside me, answers my plea
Why look for an angel, one sleeps beside me

Answer 1

How beautiful. If that's the way you really feel about your wife, she is a blessed woman.

Answer 2

The poem is okay, but there are parts that would improve with editing. I'd suggest you have someone else read the poem out loud to you. Don't correct their reading, just listen and make notes. You'll hear where the words don't flow right, where the phrase sounds contrived or forced, and you'll hear where it works quite well. There is nothing "wrong" with your poem, but you can make it better if you try the suggestion I've provided. I think your wife will love it no matter how much you do or do not edit it, but if you want to make it "better", a little editing will go a long way.

keep writing

Answer 3

Strong, powerful and well intentioned. Introspection means a lot when writing about your woman especially when you take action on your own thoughts.

This missive is well put, well written and easily understood.

There are a few grammatical corrections to be made and I'll leave them for you to figure out. If you get stuck let me know.

One clue you can use conjunctions in writing poetry.

Answer 4

I like this very much... it truly shows how your thoughts and behavior have matured through the years.... the last verse is the best..

Good Job!!!!!

Answer 5

that's so beautiful. you're wife is very lucky! you should frame it and give this to her for your anniversary. she would love it. keep it up! fantastic work.