One of my poems?

Question

This is one of my poems please tell me how good/bad it is, I wrote it when I was 13.


Life
I let it pass me by
Before my very eye
I thought nothing about it
I didn't doubt it
I never caught it
Till it went for a spin
It turned upside-down
And tossed me to the ground
I got back up where I had fallen
And shook my head
How could I have
Let it pass me by right before my very eye

Well to tell you the truth I'm only 14 almost 15 but I wrote this because of a hard past when I realized no matter how hard things are now they were harder, so I have to be happy for that.

Answer 1

wow!!!!!!!!!!!!! u ve a vry beautifull art of riting peoms please do rite some more

Answer 2

Well, it's pretty good considering when you wrote it and how little of life you had at the time to draw from. If you've already learned not to take life for granted, you've learned a lesson that most adults don't learn until very late in life.

Regarding the poetry, well, it's not bad. Be careful of using short lined couplets, they tend to sound very "rhymy", if you know what I mean. If you want to do rhymed poetry, then try doing some different rhyme patterns and lines that are a little longer. It sounds like you have a good ear for what works, you only need to write more, read more, and edit more to keep moving along your way to being a "very" good poet.

don't stop writing...keep writing, and reading

Answer 3

I'm also 14 going 15 in December. I have written many poems. I'm writing them also on yahoo answers. Feel free to look and criticize. I liked the concept of your poem but..... it was too simple in the way you wrote it. It looks like anyone would've wrote it. Unless of course you wanted to make it simple. I'm not trying to offend you just help.

Answer 4

It sounds like it was written by someone who may have taken the life that they had for granted until something bad happened and learned from it.
You wrote it when you were 13, what insight you must have now!
I think that it's wonderful!