and if you think is good would you give me a star???
love ya
***MY WISHES***
I wish that just by closing my eyes,i could be where you're at...I wish i could fly,so i can fly near you...so many wishes inside me...because thinking of you brings to my mind a lot of things i will love to do with you...but i just can't...would be nice that just for one single time i could apear where you're at...so i can tell you how much i miss not seeing your smile,your eyes and listening your voice...I wish i could bring you near to me and keep you for ever,never see you leaving...I guest i just gotta go with what i have now...because at least i have you...Maybe not all the time and every single hour but i know that everywhere you go,you think of me like i think of you ...and at least this way we are together forever.......AM I RIGHT???...........................................
invented by :joliely
so what do you think?
2007-08-02 03:37:28 · 21 answers · asked by Sm1l3 6 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
YES I WOTED THINKING OF A VERY SPECIAL FRIEND
AND SORRY 4 THE MISTAKES
2007-08-02 03:55:04 · update #1
It's a lovely bit of writing with lots of emotion in it. Made me think of my brother who's 'anniversary' is coming up!
the star is yours! x
2007-08-02 03:43:55 · answer #1 · answered by Dave 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
mmm... its quite good in a sense, but I'm not much of a fan of sentimental poems. Those who are would probably like it. It does have some grammatical flaws, and it is a bit informal at one point, and also has a spelling mistake. I know I probably sound like a critic, but that is mostly because I am used to reading more complex things. It was a really good try, and I probably wouldn't do any better in any sense except spelling. I hope my critisism won't lead you to disliking me.
Keep trying!!
2007-08-02 03:48:17 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very heartfelt to someone you share so much with.I am happy for you have found something special in someone who motivates your softer side.... This could be a published care card ... but I'm sure you wouldn't want to publish something so personnal . Wouldn' t it be wonderfull to be able to fly to the ones we love in a instant?
2007-08-02 03:57:33 · answer #3 · answered by lilly l 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I examine this two times. the style you layer longer tale-appropriate prose is admirable, and something I unquestionably have plenty hardship with. you're making it look uncomplicated, organic, yet all human beings who write comprehend the alternative is genuine. I frequently degree the effectiveness of a chunk by ability of the kind of TD's........Jealousy rears it somewhat is eco-friendly head. Kudos to you, Mr Carney.
2016-10-01 06:16:46 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I was kind of lost it sounds nice but you need proper grammer for people to fullly understand your poem! but it sounds good. If you like or enjoy writing poems then keep writing and keep trying.
2007-08-02 03:44:45 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Girl I love It It Makes Me Cry
2007-08-02 03:41:12 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Umm poems are usually put in the POEMS section.
2007-08-02 03:50:11 · answer #7 · answered by Zach 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think its great, I couldn't find a better word to describe. Yeah, its wonderful. You are right.
2007-08-02 03:42:20 · answer #8 · answered by Goldman 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's hard to read a poem if it doesn't have the aesthetic structure.
2007-08-02 03:56:01 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Efforts continue to write good ~!
2007-08-02 03:40:46 · answer #10 · answered by akpar 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋