Do you like this poem?

Question

Everyone surely has darkness
Hidden somewhere in their heart
Sometimes it prevents them
From living as they wish

We can't imagine other people's pain
It's hard for us to share it

But if I meet someone
Whom I really want to face
I don't want to feel fear

You shut the door of your heart with a violent noise
And lost the key to open it
A long time ago
So please tell me
Exactly what you feel
Just with common words
And with common expressions
Please let me hear

It's so fearful to believe
What is invisible and formless
But if you can do so
Don't you feel it's wonderful?

Even in the middle of such a grey city
Where you can hardly hold yourself together

Don't laugh so weakly
With a resigned look
As if to say "Such is life"

Where is the person
Who could get what he wanted
Without making any sacrifices
You see?
You have the thing which I long for
Which I had lost and will never get again
However strongly I wish for it

You shut the door of your heart with a violent noise
And lost the key to open it
A long time ago
So please tell me
Exactly what you feel
Just with common words
And with common expressions

Where is the person
Who could get what he wanted
Without making any sacrifices
You see?
You have the thing which I long for
Which I had lost and will never get again
However strongly I wish for it

It's so dazzling to me

Answer 1

Yes. I especially like the stanzas that begin with "You shut the door of your heart with a violent noise" (I like this line too). I like the beginning a little less, because it is a kind of generalization, and I prefer specific situations and characters in poetry.

Answer 2

Overall, I like the poem; the poem has inspired moments, but starts and stops in an uncertain way. Its phrasing at times is beautiful, at other times mundane, yet it's obvious there is knowledge behind the choices. This poem leaves me a bit undecided...I want to like it, but there are parts I'd edit due to the weakness of the words.

If you wrote this, you should look it over and decide if the uneveness is what you are truly after, as I don't think it contributes to the poem. If you did not write it, then you should have put the name of the author at the end of the poem, or introduced it as being by "so in so".

I sense that the author could have improved upon the poem, but the poem does communicate even the way it is currently written.

Answer 3

Wow! I could taste the desperation and deep emotion throughout this poem. And although the poem speaks of trying to understand the unknown, all can relate to this poem because we have all felt this way.

My favorite line: Don't laugh so weakly
With a resigned look
As if to say "Such is life"

I can sense the wisdom behind these lines, showing mastery of non-acceptance in life for the sake of justice!

Simply fantastic :-)

Answer 4

Excellent write!

Answer 5

wow that was amazing. Please if you really wrote that continue to keep writting. I was drawn into it from the very beggining. It was beautiful. The way you put you're words and expressed them it was truely amazing. i applaud you that was truely, truely, truely great.

Answer 6

Very Nice. Who wrote it???