Moments
As the firey glow sets in the sky.
Shadows creep closer by.
Darkness embrace the dead of night.
Earth stands still until dawns first light.
2007-07-30 15:23:18 · 11 answers · asked by hksimmons 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Wow, Thats really good, I like where your words put my mind state. I wasn't expecting that for such a short piece. Well done
2007-07-30 16:49:51 · answer #1 · answered by behindthesmile22 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Rhyme's okay but thematically it's rather pointless. Sunset, Shadows, Darkness, Dawn Where are the moments you speak of? How does darkness embrace? And what is earth standing for, did it stop spinning until dawn? Your metaphors don't hold up well.
2007-07-30 22:47:59 · answer #2 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I really liked it,
and the word is, " f i e r y ".
I agree with Anthony C, you should write
more to it.
It has a nice title,
and is full of " moments ".
2007-07-31 01:50:29 · answer #3 · answered by elliebear 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it
it seems kinda lonely
2007-07-30 22:49:55 · answer #4 · answered by dreamer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it a lot a lot.
2007-07-30 22:58:47 · answer #5 · answered by :) 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
what a beautiful picture you have painted!!
2007-07-30 22:31:29 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it good but hard to understand its meaning
2007-07-30 22:31:16 · answer #7 · answered by tar man 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
that was amazing, really beautiful.
2007-07-30 22:30:24 · answer #8 · answered by *♥Jinx♥* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
emo
2007-07-30 22:31:41 · answer #9 · answered by Strawberriieess 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
wow...just...wow
2007-07-30 22:27:05 · answer #10 · answered by Angel S 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋