Night Essay?

Question

Critique please:
Prompt: One of the most tragic themes in Night is Eliezer’s discovery of the way that atrocities and cruel treatment can make good people into brutes. Does he himself escape this fate?
Response:
Despite the difficult circumstances, Eliezer has been consistent to his morals. He is ashamed of the actions taken by some to ensure their own survival, and at times, he even criticizes himself. After struggling to survive day to day, not knowing what will happen next, every person is forced to make decisions that test one’s will and strength.
On the way to Buchenwald, Rabbi Eliahou asks Eliezer if he had seen his son. Eliezer realizes that the Rabbi’s son, in attempt to free himself from the burden of his weak and feeble father, ran as quick and as far away as possible from his own father. In order to free himself from an impediment that could greatly reduce his own chances of survival, he sought separation and left his ailing and limping father. Eliezer, embarrassed

and disgusted, prays for the strength to never abandon his own father and commit the same wrong. Eliezer knows very well fate might coerce him to be in the same situation, and he yearns that he would be able to resist the strong temptation to discard all his beliefs and morals.
At Buchenwald, Eliezer receives advice that, “Here, every man has to fight for himself and not think of anyone else.” Despite the urging, Eliezer continues to sacrifice bits and pieces of his meager ration to give to his beloved father. Deep down in his heart, he deeply craves and desires for food beyond imagination, but he understands that his father needs it more. His love for his father was able to suppress the fate that forced so many good men to turn into brutes.
During the Holocaust, survival meant sacrifice. The decisions that the prisoners were forced to make can seem renounceable and condemnable, but not making these hard choices almost guaranteed death. Eliezer refused to give in, and miraculously l

luck protected him and aided him in his survival. However, countless people were not as fortunate and lost the fight because they were unwilling to go against their faith and morals. Pure luck and fortune guided Eliezer and helped him escape his doomed fate.

Please be honest and give as detailed advice as possible

Revision:
Despite the difficult circumstances, Eliezer is able to endure the atrocities and remain true to his character and consistent with his morals. His discovery of the actions taken by some to ensure their own survival sickens and disgusts him, and at times, he even criticizes his own behavior and thoughts. After struggling to survive day to day, not knowing what will happen next, every person is forced to make decisions that test one’s character. Nevertheless, Eliezer is able to preserve his altruism
On the way to Buchenwald, Rabbi Eliahou asks Eliezer if he had seen his son. Eliezer lies to the Rabbi even though he realizes that the Rabbi’s son, in attempt to free himself from the burden of his weak and feeble father, distanced himself as far away as possible from his father.

In order to free himself from an impediment that could greatly reduce his own chances of survival, he sought separation and left his ailing and limping father. Eliezer, embarrassed and disgusted, prays for the strength to never abandon his own father and commit the same wrong. Eliezer knows very well fate might coerce him to be in the same situation, and he yearns that he would be able to resist the strong temptation to discard all his beliefs and morals.
At Buchenwald, Eliezer receives advice that, “Here, every man has to fight for himself and not think of anyone else.” Despite the urging, Eliezer continues to sacrifice bits and pieces of his meager ration of food to give to his beloved father. Deep down, his craving and desire for food is unbearable, but he understands that his father needs it more. His love for his father is able to suppress the venality that exists in all men. His father’s love prevents him from encountering the fate that forced so many good men to turn into brute

brutes.
During the Holocaust, survival meant sacrifice. The decisions that the prisoners were forced to make can seem renounceable and condemnable, but not making these arduous choices almost guaranteed death. Eliezer refused to give in and his strong virtues miraculously protected him and aided him in his survival. However, countless people who were unwilling to go against their faith and morals were not as fortunate and lost the fight. Fortunately, Eliezer was able to remain true to himself, and luck and fortune helped preserve his life as well.

Answer 1

how long did it take you to write all of it i think it is a good essay but who am i to say.

Answer 2

You present good points and excerpts from the book.

You just need to clearly state your answer yes or no to the question, before you list the points/examples explaining your viewpoint (I would delineate these examples clearly, introducing each point that defends your answer), and then close your essay by recapping it again on a conclusive note, perhaps elaborating on how he became an even better, more humane person for his decisions. So the reader can tell from reading your first and last sentence what your answer is, and each of the supporting points are clearly enumerated and not run together.

From your essay answer, it seems you would argue he not only escaped the trap of becoming a brute, but in fact grew in strength and character for having faced these challenges and consciously decided to act humanely and selflessly. You could say that his moral decision to choose those spiritual qualities of life over mere physical survival demonstrates that he purposely fought against the temptation to do as others did, and not only survived but came out a better person for it.

Answer 3

hi