good, bad, in between??

Question

Distance is what our enemy be named. But no matter what, I think of you. I long to touch and feel your cheek against mine. I love you with a passion and no matter what it will stay. You are mine and that is what matters. You make me smile you make me laugh, and I dont care what anyone says. They can bend and break me until I snap in two, but forever I will love you.

Answer 1

In between...first of all, please, use line breaks...it isn't "passe", it just helps the reader understand the phrasing. Punctuation is the same story. It also helps you see the hard spots and any repetition you are trying to avoid. I'd also recommend rephrasing the first line to read, "Distance may be our enemy's name" watch how different your poem looks and reads with just that one change, line breaks and some punctuation:

Distance may be our enemy's name
But no matter what
I think of you.
I long to touch and feel
your cheek
against mine.
I love you, with a passion!
and no matter what, it will stay.
You are mine, and that, is what matters.
You make me smile
you make me laugh
and I dont care what anyone says!
They can bend and break me
until I snap in two
but forever
I will love you

see? and all the words were yours...I only added the breaks and some punctuation.

nice poem

Answer 2

In between once again. I love with a passion weak ananlogy. To me love and passion are one in the same or are to close and there in the close it's there is again it will stay so that is what happens when you have a passion for something. Watch sports it's overplayed like the pharse mental toughness. It does seem to go a little down hill from there you are mine and that is what matters. I tend to think psycho but that is the first thought and that is fine because love can make you into a psyco because a person that is in love is always going to bring up the thing they the most. And who doesn't want you two too love each either is it the capulets and montagues.

Answer 3

There is a consolations and pardon in between good and bad from Gods side. The more you love you get consolations in your aspirations and if you do some bad, god is always ahead in pardonning you, what ever you said in these lines are definately your expression of love towards God and God is always ahead to console you, Bravo You are!

Answer 4

Dicen que cuando Gepeto hizó a Pinocho, se le olvidó de hacerle el pene, entonces Gepeto muy preocupado por el error, se le apareció ET el extraterrestre, y le dijo no te aflijas lo único que podemos hacer es compensar este problema y darle algo a cambio.

A la semana se le apareció de nuevo ET y le dijo a Gepeto ya tengo la solución, algún día le haremos presidente de un país largo aunque sus penes sean pequeños y en honor a mi ya no será Pinocho sino PINOCH-ET (Pinochet), le dijo además que en su gobierno habría marchas y contramarchas pero la marcha que más daría risa sería la marcha de los calatos.

Para que se acuerden de él (ET) le dijo “y a falta de pene, ustedes tendrán que usar el trasero, por eso todos los países lo reconocerán como los ROTOS y para que se acuerden que lo que digo es verdad en el futuro haré un hoyo en la capa de ozono por el lado de ustedes.

Answer 5

I really like this, it's written with obvious passion for whoever it's written about. Great job.

Answer 6

Bad

Answer 7

the person for whom you have written this is very lucky....to have you...i wish you guys the best of luck...

anything that comes from the heart is always divine...

the stanza is beautifully written

Answer 8

I wish it was me! Good

Answer 9

if i answer it doesnt make a matter to you so i am not answering

Answer 10

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Loved it...........

Keep on writing like this for me............... n mail it to me so my GF will be happy...