Does this sentence look like a thesis to you? if not... can you help me make it interesting to write? pls?

Question

Popular culture eased the tension between conflicting group.

group means gender and races since popular culture started at 1910. Is it a bad thesis?

Or maybe I could change it like
White men retained their dominance during 1910s but women, people with color and the lower working class gained increasingly influential role in the expression of popular culture....

Is that also a thesis? I'm just not good in constucting words.. so i really appreciate you're help tnx........

Answer 1

Yes, the second one is better. It's more specific - aim for *specifics* and *details*.

Try: "White men dominated the production of popular culture in the early 1900s, but women, people of color, and the working classes increasingly influenced popular culture as the twentieth century wore on."

But what exactly *about* popular culture? Do you mean to say that white men produced it? That they were the only ones consuming it? That they depicted themselves (rather than women or racialized folk) in it?

You could be even more specific and identify what *types* of pop culture: film, books, theater, music ... Oh, also identify *where this is happening*. I'll guess America, so add that to your thesis statement: "the production of popular culture in America in the early 1900s."

Answer 2

Try this: "The role of Popular Culture in ironing out racial differences and gender bias, and class distinctions, in the post 1910 era." Or, "The remedies resulting from Popular Culture, to ease tensions from racial differences, gender bias and class distinctions, in the post 1910 era."

Answer 3

The changed version is a million times better than the first one. It's a little sloppy grammatically, but otherwise is EXACTLY what a good thesis should be.

Answer 4

I would write it like so:

Popular culture eased the tensions bewteen conflicting gender and races.

I liked what you had be seeing that you had to explain what "group" was, then you should just say what group is instead of just saying group.

Good luck on your paper! I hope I helped.