Am i a good poet?? Im 13! I started writing when i was 11 and latley i aint wrote much but here are some of my

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latest poems!
My dreams of evil, fire, and death. Pain and anger, I'm loosing my breath. I'm holding on tightly as i start to slip. I hurry... To tighten my grip. I scream your name, scream for your help but apparently you only cared for yourself, and i can't hang on... My fingers are sweaty. My legs become heavy. Catch me when I fall.

Control me, put me on a leash and hold me. In one place, the same old thing, day after day. I know what you told me. Yes sir, I'll obey. Your "my" god! Is that what I should say? No, I'm not trying to play, this aint a game. Master just say and I will live my life in shame. Every day will be exactly the same, you tell me what to do and I will obey. Control me master. Put me in my place. Everything I do is a mistake and I should be blames. You've now got what you want. I'm yours. Control me.

Answer 1

It's an alright poem, but I would re-word somethings. Also never leave it in paragraph form, put it in a stanza. I'd say "My fingers lose your grip" and "My legs are becoming heavy instead of sweaty and the other words.

P.S. NEVER say your age on the net, please, there are pedophiles out there.

Answer 2

Don't worry about being a "good" poet, just be a poet who tries to get better. Being "good" is too subjective and even famous poets aren't always considered good until after they've been dead awhile. So, just be a poet and be true to your heart.

That being said, your poem was "okay" for a 13 year old, but I've heard many that were better, done by younger poets. However, poetry is not a competition for "who's the best", it's communication, it's like walking into an art museum and saying, "okay, show me your best painting." How in the heck can they do that? There are drawings, water colors, pastels, oils, and each have been done in different styles over hundreds of years! However, you know, as you walk in, that you are in the presence of "art" and that you are looking at some of the "best" in a world overpopulated with wonderful art. Just to be the smallest painting in a large gallery means something...so be a poet first, and let history decide how good you were.

Your poem was almost a "rant"...not necessarily good. Your rhymes were on the run and often predictable and shallow. There was spite dripping from half your lines and I can only hope you don't really feel that way about being dominated (if you do, get help now). Try not to use words like "ain't"...and don't whine that "everything I do is a mistake", that's called "passive-agressive" and it's not going to fool anyone into feeling sorry for you.

Now that we've got all the bad stuff out of the way, let me say this: the fact that you are a 13 year old interested in poetry is wonderful. The fact that you can speak from the heart, is also a good, positive thing. Go outside and scream at the top of your lungs, then go inside, drink a glass of water and sit down to write a poem. Why? Because you need to get at least some of the anger out of your system, because it's overpowering your creativity and hindering your communication abilities. I'm not telling you to write about pretty flowers, but unless you can see clearly, you'll only see the hate...your poem was full of it, both outward and inward directed. Does all teenage poetry need to be about anger, angst, or puppy love? No, please say no.

Now, go write a poem about something you are NOT angry about. Write about it without telling anyone what it is directly, see how well you can communicate and try not to make short, choppy lines. You have a poetic voice, it just needs to be trained.

keep writing

Answer 3

Yes, I would say your above average for your age. Why don't you take a summer class on poetry or maybe one for writing skills? Your only going to get better as you get older, if you keep it up. If its something you like to do then go for it! Who cares what other people think?

Answer 4

You are a hell of a good poet! Simply amazing, and considering you are 13 and knowing writing style improves as you grow... You'll surely be the best!
GOOD LUCK... KEEP IT UP!

Answer 5

I believe you're average. Take a class and I'm sure you'll excel nicely.

Answer 6

not in peom form. its good though.


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Answer 7

i agree with kevin s