As I was gazing out one morning
From the skies, there came a warning
Of impending things to come
For us all, and not for some
Soon the mighty winds will gale
Sending down a heavy hail
We’ll see visions from our past
For some moments, they will last
And some will surely cry
Thinking they are doomed to die
But from the sky, an angels face
Searching those who fell from grace
Then she covered me with her wing
Protecting me from everything
She said that he has chosen you
And some others, but just a few
You will go out and spread the word
Making sure that it is heard
I said I’ll heed the call
And will spread to one and all
He has said the world can live
For our sins, he will forgive
Then I woke up from my sleep
And my promise, I’ll still keep
2007-07-29 01:49:40 · 9 answers · asked by gary_b04901 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Good work, there were a couple of places the lyrics got bogged a little in missed cadence, but overall a good effort. I will not attempt to rewrite it for you, as that is something for you to do in order to make it better. Enjoyed reading it.
2007-08-01 09:13:28 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A lovely poem.
2016-05-17 05:09:25 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Gary ; this is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read,You wrote all the right words and it all came together good,Your a great writer ; and should really keep it up.I loved it all; nice work.....Shelly
2007-07-29 05:35:03 · answer #3 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very inspiring,did Revelations give you this?I mean the idea for it.May God Bless or watch over you today.
2007-07-29 05:47:01 · answer #4 · answered by Bookworm101 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very inspiring.
I like the music and flow.
And is this your way of keeping your promise?
2007-07-29 05:27:18 · answer #5 · answered by Katie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thank You for blessing us with this inspiring poem. God is truly touching your heart and soul.
2007-07-29 05:40:34 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, alot!
reminds me of a poem i read in the collections of Rupert brooke....(one of my favorite poets!).
maybe you could give it a better more catchy title like; POEMS OF A PROPHET!
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JUST A THOUGHT!?
2007-07-30 06:25:10 · answer #7 · answered by aisha felynfils 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, very eerie... especially if you read Revelations, which I'm sure is your inspiration.
2007-07-29 03:17:04 · answer #8 · answered by Dinosaur 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
review you pronouns, the shift from she to he and from you to I is confusing. why a dream? i think the poem will be forceful without it.
2007-07-29 02:26:12 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋