I Can Indeed Feel
I wish life could come easily,
Like the books on a shelf,
School use to bring so much misery,
Teardrops,
Often glistened in my eyes,
I went to class everyday,
With my eyes averted to the ground,
At lunch i kept my head in my arms,
Days would pass,
And every year i hoped for something new,
You didnt have to be my friend,
I just wanted solitude,
So I could come to school,
Without wondering what you may say today,
Did you not know,
That I am human too?
I can do all the same as you,
I can bleed,
I can laugh,
I can hate,
I can joke,
I can even do something,
I wonder if you ever knew?
I can feel,
I can cry,
What did you think that I was made of steel?
That i only looked real,
Well then i assure you,
I can indeed feel.
2007-07-28 18:48:52 · 11 answers · asked by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
in reference to goldmine if you really want to know i was reffering to myself.
2007-07-28 19:17:03 · update #1
wow. i know exactly what this poem is about!!!
3rd grade, every day, hell over and over...just like my 7th grade...
i really like at the end you said 'what did you think that I was made of steel?/That i only looked real,/Well then i assure you,/
I can indeed feel.
very nice!!! i love it!!! keep writing, ya never know what might keep popping into your mind...sometimes it just helps to keep doing it all the time, so that you are more used to it, and then you start to realy flow with more and more ideas.
nice job!!!
2007-07-29 16:03:08 · answer #1 · answered by writer_2b 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a good poem. A *very* good poem actually. But to be honest, I never really liked the poems that where whining about school. However, I'm sure that you're a great poet. The subject was the only thing I didn't like as much, but you executed it so well. Especially the last part and the beginning. Good Job.
2007-07-29 01:55:37 · answer #2 · answered by Master Answers 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Actually, this is a very thoughtful poem, and very well written. I'd only change the last line...maybe, "I too can feel", because it's the only line that seems out of character from a linguistic consistency perspective.
I'd also add a comma in the second to last line so it reads, "well, then, I assure you," or "well then, I assure you".
bravo poet!
2007-08-02 22:44:44 · answer #3 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Life comes easily for no one... not even the most hateful or popular person in school. We all bleed. We all cry.
It is ironic though, that in the solitude you crave... you attempt to reach out to humanity through the poetry you create.
All we can really do is first love ourselves and then love ALL others. Nothing else remains!
2007-07-29 02:04:53 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
That was the best poem that you have ever writen. It really touched me close at heart. I thought that only you could write such a beautiful poem. I was right when I said that you could be great. I look forward to writing that book with you. Luv yah much Grl!!!!!! LYLAS!!!!!
2007-07-29 10:54:50 · answer #5 · answered by Argent 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Take your time, with the using of words and/or phrases, in allowing the poem to develop onto itself. So, that it may stand alone.
2007-08-04 19:05:33 · answer #6 · answered by cockroachdavis 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Says a lot about you, but prose is not one of my favorite things. Sounds more like an essay, but that is my own preference. I am more fond of lyrical poetry.
2007-08-01 16:04:58 · answer #7 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A poet myself, I thought the whole concept was good. Who were you referring to? Would have liked to know,
2007-07-29 02:08:51 · answer #8 · answered by Goldmine 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Omg that was sad.Its a good poem.Made me feel what the poem says.
2007-07-29 01:57:02 · answer #9 · answered by - 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It was beautiful. I can definitely relate to it. 10!
2007-07-29 19:10:47 · answer #10 · answered by LizzWeasley 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋